or sign in with e-mail
Don't have an account? Register Here!
by Elizabeth Feb 13, 2011
Nature, environment /
Snow fall covers land
like the flowing river, still
beating of our hearts
I love your haiku's, they say such beautiful things with so few words you bring nature to life
by Rania Moallem
I agree with Larry..but let me just talk about the wording? AAAAAMAAAAZINGGG>>AMAZINGG!!
I love how all the members of : Like the flowing river..had absolutely a different idea for the title..
amazing job lizziee
I adore u!
by Larry Chamberlin
however, the technical format for a haiku (as with a senru) is
5 - 7 - 5
your format now is
8 - 9 - 6.
Most of the time we accomplish the sparity of beats by eliminating articles & compressing ideas into ferwer words.
Snow falls, covers land
Then you develop the theme & put the pathos or irony into the third line to seal the nugget.
Try your rewrite in the format & J think you'll like the outcome