The opinions of one kid may not mean much to you, but I really loved this. It was beautiful, I really felt as if the words were sinking into my hold skin, and I could feel the emotion written here...Well done! :)
I felt the longing and sadness held in your words deeply. It reminds me of when I lost my first love, to someone else. I love the metaphors you used to portray this vision of pain. It's crazy how moving forward can hurt more than going back sometimes.