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  • 6 years ago

    by Taylor Marie

    Mann This is DEEP! <3

  • 6 years ago

    by deeplydesturbed

    Thanks :)

  • 1 year ago

    by Belle

    It can feel like drowning when you care about people too much. Especially if you care about them more than they care for you. Lovely poem.

  • 1 year ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Well Done!!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Ren

    Hey there,
    Very gruesome and vivid images painted here.
    I could almost feel myself in this situation, feeling the monsters trying to eat me alive...and then the terrifying and relieved feeling of realizing it was all a dream.
    I think you did a wonderful job describing this nightmare and the underlying fear of not wanting to leave your loved ones behind...and the need to feel that love returned.
    Great job!

  • 1 year ago

    by Kips

    This is pretty dark and gory! I was hoping there would be a happy ending to this one, then I realized it was just a dream! Way to keep it suspenseful!!

  • 1 year ago

    by Karrington

    Very nice

  • 1 year ago

    by Jenn

    Wow! I instantly thought night terrors.

    "I'm tired and sick and my blood is on the floor... i feel my skin being ripped from my body as these night monsters attack..."

    I suffered from night terrors when I was young. I was diagnosed as a Manic Depressant, and at night was the worse. when the house was quite.. it felt like the life was being sucked out of the world, and out of me. i connected with this statement.

    "i need to wake up.. to be set free... my mind is taking over my body... i can feel the torture, even though i know its not real..what is happening to me..."

    A lot of people don't realize that when in that mindset when dreaming, even when You know its not real it beyond terrifying.

    Final

    "I'm happy... i met a friend who actually cares... why am i still feeling like this??? i shouldn't be... i need freedom.. I'm tired of being locked up in a house all day being watched... i need to get out... help me 2 escape.. if these Monsters eat me i will die, but i cant leave the people i care about behind... i will miss them... i cant leave.. then i wake up and realize it was all a dream."

    Back then most of my dreamed ended in me dying, almost killing myself, or being murdered by some menacing dark figure.
    And even at my worst times when even awake I hated the idea of being in existence one more day.. What always stopped me, was the thought of my family and loved one... leaving one would break their heart. kept me from walking off that ledge.

    Wonderfully pinned, left me yearning for more! 5. Jenn