I feel the beast deep within me
Growing larger and stronger day after day
It's watching my every move
Waiting for me to make a mistake
Fear swells up in my mind and heart
The beast wants blood
Hungers for pain and violence
I don't know how much longer I can last
Struggling to keep myself from going berserk
I fight the animal but feel like losing the war
One question is remains
After the dust settles who is left...
Hmmm it is good. Shows the sides of weakness every person has when most people are too afraid to show it. This part:
"One question is remains
After the dust settles who is left..."
..... it leaves me wanting more. It gets me a little excited to see the battle between the narrator and this beast! You should make a sequal about this epic battle!
Great poem 5/5