Caught

by silvershoes   Jul 23, 2012


Then you leaned in, two inches from
my bloodless face;
parted lips caught in a gasp,
and I knew I had to complete the kiss,
or you would never try again.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Nicko

    Is it me or am I seeing more of these short poems lately? Never the less, a captivating 5 lines, much in the same vein as Melissa would write, chocked full of intrigue and innuendo. Does your lover discern your anxiety, Maybe? Like two dancers not quite in sync, dancing around the uncertainty of the inevitable

  • 11 years ago

    by Darren

    Very sensual, great emotion in this, for a small piece it tells a much bigger tale.
    Every word you have used here earns its place and says as much as a 20 line poem. Great job

  • 11 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I have to say i loved this write.

    Just like a kiss, one that last a few seconds can just as amazing as one that goes on and on :-)
    and that moment just before a first kiss with someone new....the hesitation...is a wonderful thing and adds to moment untold :-)

    I like how there is just enough to feed the imagination and i really enjoyed reading it :-)

    Love it, but im a big softy so i will lol

  • 11 years ago

    by Hellon

    Have you ever watched the movie...While you were Sleeping? This so reminds me of a scene from it...Joe jnr..fancies Lucy and 'leans in' Jack sees it and later tries to demonstrate to Lucy what leaning in means...it's such a romantic movie and full of innocence (ok.. some deception also haha)and so was this verse Jane...I really, really liked it!

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Interesting write Jane. I like how it was simplisticly short and to the point. Nice write. Keep up the great work. :)

    Peace and love, Joe

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