Comments : Terrorism ( senryu )

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    Wow few words said it all, I'm in love with this piece. Awesome job:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    A few words, yet so powerful
    Hate is a terrible thing.
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Great message baby rainbow.
    Right to the point. Nice :)

  • Mindless acts of hate

    ^^
    From the outside it would definitely seem mindless, but to those who are doing the terrorising, they always have an agenda. Then the revenge starts and it's a never ending tirade of hate.
    A perfect start to this piece.

    destroying families and

    ^^
    That's all that really happens isn't it? Innocent lives are lost, and simply because governments can't sit down and negotiate/compromise like mature adults. To think these people lead us - terrorists and politicians (who most of the 'hate' is aimed toward) alike.

    creating deep grief.

    ^^
    Definitely. Even 'deep grief' is not deep enough the pain that is caused by these acts of terrorism. Enough is enough, I think.

    Overall;
    Such a powerful piece. So short, but straight to the point. A fantastic message to spread.

    Well deserved nomination. (:

    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Mindless acts of hate

    Now that's something...

    Your 1st line without doubt defines your title without reaching
    the 2nd, or even the 3rd.
    What is terrorism ? yes it is an act, that's for one, mindless ofcourse, because they are brainwashed, or sick in the head, and no bet out of hate.
    Now...you could use another term, meaningwise regarding mindless that would have a stronger impact linguistically speaking. Because those brainwashed people do have an aim, they aim to harm. But since I dont have suggestions, let's keep it :p

    2nd line:
    destroying families and
    ^
    excellent usage of word! what is destroyable ? anything that isn't fragile, cause else, it wouldn't need an act to be destroyed...and a family is this full package that is represented as entity that is in need of one another....they come and just...destroy it like that with a click of a hand... cause :

    creating deep grief.
    ^
    excellent ending line...that's exactly how it goes...deep grief that cannot be healed with time, because terrorism is not Gods will, it was not fair, it's not something that happens with everyone, though is happening on daily basis...

    thanks for writing, writing is reminding...and that so people wont forget.
    thank you

  • 11 years ago

    by Karla

    Perfect.

  • 11 years ago

    by nouriguess

    Yes, indeed.