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  • 4 years ago

    by Beauty In The Breaking

    This was absolutely wonderfully well done. I loved reading it and can so understand it. I loved how deeply the emotions ran through the whole thing. Great job 5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by Kuro

    Made me think of the album cover for a band called In Flames. "Come Clarity" good album. Actually ima see if I can make it my profile pic

    It's stuck in my head now

  • 4 years ago

    by Dreamofolwin

    Ohh how I love this poem by you! All because I too know I monster ,,, and its true, they damage themselves with their attitude!

    Very well written & expressed Nik :D
    BRAVO!

  • 4 years ago

    by Terrin

    This is a great emotional palm good job

  • 4 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    Excellent poem acknowledging and expressing leaving behind a destructive relationship and moving on. LOVE this line: "Broken as I may be, I will rise." Also really like the line: "I know we're all just pieces in
    one twisted game."

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    The words in this write shows the depth of your hurt and in the end it is the person who has done all this atrocities falls into an inescapable pit...take care dear.

  • 4 years ago

    by tykya

    I can understand it very touching and keeps going on with a story was need to be heard for somebody to relate to it

  • 4 years ago

    by Stephen

    Although this is heartbreaking, it's absolutely beautiful! You've expressed yourself so well. I love the imagery you've conveyed and your use of chess as an example.. how so very true it is..

    I gave my heart
    to a monster,
    expecting him to change his nature
    for my ignorance.

    ^^ I loved the way you started this write as it completely consumed me and left me wanting more. The feelings these 4 lines conveyed, as if you knew he mistreated people in the past, but hoped possibly you could be the one he would cherish.. Ah I've been there.

    Then you go on expressing these feelings of hopelessness so vividly I could feel them myself. So heartbreaking!

  • 3 years ago

    by DON DYABLO

    I loved your poem the flow of emotions

  • 3 years ago

    by Lemon Squeezy

    Nik, this is a gr8 poem. I especially liked when u compared the struggle with "the monster" to a chess game. Brilliant!! I could almost feel the emotions as I read it. It only stinks that u had to experience such hurt. Truly feel for u. But excellent work