One September morning
I awakened from a dream.
Inspiring flowers bloomed and
I was lost in the fragrant aroma.
The steps to achieving my goals
were handwritten on the petals
of my colorful imagination.
Light bulbs were flashing.
I carved my to-do list onto
the hardwood floors
as a constant reminder;
to ensure I achieve it.
When opportunity phones me,
I explain to you our conversation.
Your discouraging words shock me
and I sense your worries and discontent.
Losing patience, you let go
of my goals that are tied
to balloons and they slowly
fly into the distant sky.
Trapped in these dark clouds,
I know I must resist and fight;
I can't continue living this way
every time I chase a dream
you chase it away from me,
and I have to watch others
catch my dreams instead.
This poem is dedicated to anyone who has faced obstacles while trying to achieve your goals. Don't let anyone discourage you and try your best to do it. There are a lot of people out there who won't support you, but if you have the determination and skills, you can achieve your dreams! So go for it! =)
What a masterpiece!
I really missed reading and commenting on your works. Am happy to be back. I loved the fact that you used the parts and concept of flowers, as a metaphor. That's wonderful, gave the poem a striking beauty, somewhat ethereal. Giving the theme a sense of 'life'.
Below is my comprehension of your piece.
1st and 2nd Stanza:
I like how you started the first line, it makes one think of a story. The subject had a dream; she saw flowers that are motivating and it had an overwhelming sweet smell that got her lost.
Written on its petals were an outline on how to achieve her aspirations, which are full of vibrant ideas. There's also light beaming from the bulb, sign of a good tiding.
3rd and 4th Stanza:
Here she engraved her lineup onto the wood floor to be reminding her regularly thus realizing it in the long run.
When an opportunity comes, she tries hard to make her negative conscience see reasons with her positive conscience. Its dissuading utterance shocking her and she can perceive the anxiety and dissatisfaction within.
In another perspective it can be a hindrance coming in the form of a person; blocking your chances of victory, or a trial; putting you in a plight that'll make you want to give up.
5th, 6th and 7th Stanza:
Impatience letting go of a staunch and tangible dream.
And that action flung the dream into nothingness.
Trapped in a pool of pessimism and uncertainty, you know you need to fight and persevere so as to win your goals.
Whenever you're pursuing a dream, that negative conscience of yours or someone or even a condition will grasp it away from you and you watch others capture it instead.
Wow! That's such a inspirational poem written flawlessly.
As humans we all have a conscience that determines our sense of right and wrong. That been said we also have to nurture that conscience with a positive nudge so that when we're susceptible to give in to the whispers of any darkness we can retreat and indulge ourselves in lightness.
Darkness can manifest in the form of people; enemy of progress, scheming ones downfall. It can also be a tribulation or perhaps our very negative conscience.
No one can do that for us, we can be motivated and influenced but we only have the power to take such convictions; to pursue our dreams.
Enjoyed reading every bit of it and I know you've helped someone to realize his/her goals despite the ramifications. Thumbs up! :-) ...