Thougth provoking indeed. And I loved the consistency of the metaphor used here, and the interesting images the hypothetical event mustered.
Just a thought...
"could He find twelve cyberfriends, trust at least eleven?"
^ dude, should "would" be used better than "could"? :) would is an act of choice, freedom, while could is an ability. Jesus has the ability to choose friends, so the question is not necessary, but whom he chooses is up to him which we are allowed to question.
"would he be beaten down in the confusion of virtual fights?"
^ I would like to change "beaten down" for a far more gory image. Even if this is just a cyber tragedy, the imagery could still fit.
I have to say, this is by far, hands down, the most creative and expressive spiritual poem I have ever read... Michael, you added a powerful message here.. beautiful!
When a writer expresses thier spirituality within a poem, it can touch the reader who shares the same views... however, when it can touch a reader who has a different spirituality... then to me thats a powerful spiritual poem... I do hope I'm expressing myself here in a respectful way... what I mean is... no matter what my views are, which are a bit different... I felt peace and comfort with this poem... and I enjoyed this greatly!
Your heart and love is beautifully expressed within... Touching read :-)
Michael, I am really inspired by this poem! It is truly beautiful and I love that you wrote it to share with everyone. Not to mention your rhymes flowed perfectly and you expressed a ton with just those lines. It was the most creative thing with the IP address, I mean who would have thought of that. I feel encouraged by this write because it brings up that simple question what would we really do? Every person we meet could be Jesus in disguise, but how will we react? And if we know it's Jesus, will we betray Him or be welcoming...Great references to the apostles as well, it's something that speaks to the heart here
Excellent! supurb! Amazing, you already know this is my kind of poetry. I absolutely dig the comparison to the internet, in particularly the deep reference with the apostles. the ryhme was flawless as well. It's funny... at first I thought you were trying to get me to go to that website and check it out, then I relized it was one of you poems. Now one of my favorites on this site. Thank you.
yes... please do get back and read more of mine. You know we ride the same wave of thinking and can appreciate each others work more than others. Please suggest to me another of your works, another you know i'll like.
Clever poem, linking a very modern theme to a very old fable.
Love the rhyming, it is an art dying such as religion, poetry has evolved and rhyming seems to be the part that is getting left behind.
You ask such an amazing question in this, would his word be spam?
Would his message be flagged as junk?
But we all know that faith is stronger than anything, (for those that follow that path)
Mmm...I have read some of the comments which I normally don't do and...well...I thought this was a tongue in cheek verse and...I still do?
It was humerous...very much so! You hint at the 12 apostles I know...leaving Judas out and yet...you eye the other 11 with suspicion and...quite rightly so! We can never be sure what goes on in this place we call the internet and you have touched this subject with a humour that has Mike stamped all over it.
Reminded me of the movie...The Man Who Sued God....worth a watch if you haven't seen it already.
Michael, your poem is creative, breathtaking, awesome. I think there are more twenty adjectives to define what I felt when I read your piece but none of them could express how much I loved what you penned. It knocked me out. The idea of a cyber Jesus on the surface to convey such a deep message is amazing. Everything here is food for thought and made me reflect on so many things. People tend to forget that behind this stupid/fantastic/terrible/incredible machine, there is a human being who deserves some respect regardless of his nationality, religion, age and etc. Sometimes I get discouraged because of virtual battles, bias and etc but I keep posting my poems because they are much more important than anything else. Besides internet is an addiction. Virtual life is hard as real life but at least we have an excuse: we don't know who is behind the screen but I do think that politeness should prevail though. Michael, cyber friendship can happen, however, it takes time to make some good friends. I don't have more than six if I am not mistaken and I want them in my life forever.
I almost forgot to tell you I loved the flow and the images you crafted. Couldn't expect less from you. I know I will always find something special when you present us with a new poem. Excellent piece
I am also one that has different spirtual beliefs, so in all honesty, I usually am quite turned off by poems of religious tones...
With that said, after reading this, several times even, I didn't feel that instantaneous wave of frustration wash over me...
Quite the opposite, really-
I have an affinity for sarcasm and like Hellon, I also read this as a "tongue-in-cheek" write and was pleased with the way you modernized your piece...
Congrats on your win Michael.