Valentine's Midnight Song

by slighte   Jan 21, 2013


I.
At midnight there is a light
that rests upon your shoulders. It sits,
watches you sing, then

explodes

through you. I need an untamed song
to define me and explode through
me. I need more than murmurs
to soak my skin in; more than
whimpers
of failed rhymes and reasons
that reach the air in front of me

and shatter.

ii.
To keep myself from feeling,
I count bar numbers in the wind; search
for symphonies in midnight sky. But stars
shiver,
like me, waiting for the moon to

detonate

so I can see more clearly
your light. I need a half born lullaby,
one that breathes slowly between words and
heart
beats.

A half born lullaby could be anything.
I need to be anything.

iii.
Sometimes I get lonely, dreaming
of midnights next to you. I need fierce
melodies to hold me.

I need more than I was told I can have.

--
13/6/12

Credit goes to Karla (http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=483272) for writing the original quote:

"I need an untamed syntax to define me
and explode through me. I need more than
I was told I can have."

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  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    [Weekly Contest Comment: 1/28/13]

    It's not too often I see poems broke up into section with Roman numerals, but I think it works extraordinarily well here, because of the emphasis the poet puts on certain words. I love the personification of midnight's light...I would classify myself as a night owl so I am captivated by anything having to do with midnight, I think it's beautiful...and this light is almost a guardian. Watching this person sing then almost merging into him/her. The "I need"'s were so strong here and different. I believed this is what this person truly needed, this song to be almost like their life support. The most haunting line was this "but stars shiver, like me, waiting for the moon to detonate", wonderful imagery that moves me to this place.....I feel as if I am limited by time. The ending was breathtaking- that loneliness is very tangible and the last line inspired me to reach out for more than I've been told. In a way, it's like we have to find what makes us tick even if others say we are not to be part of this or that. Thoughtful and gorgeous write!

  • 4 years ago

    by Skyler

    As a veteran of long distance relationships, stanza iii, along with the last line tugs at my heart strings. This is a great work.

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    First off, congrats on the win :) This poem has such passion in it that the reader can feel it. There is a gentle flow from start to finish wrapped with vivid imagery..very nicely penned!

  • 4 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    First off, congrats on the win :) This poem has such passion in it that the reader can feel it. There is a gentle flow from start to finish wrapped with vivid imagery..very nicely penned!

  • 4 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Congratulations on the win!!! Your voice is so passionate here and I feel like I should now reach out and find what will really fill my soul, instead of just what people saw would fit for my life. This is why I should more often venture in the love section! A beautiful, exquisite write. Thanks for sharing... :]

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