Nature in its simplistic grandeur, I do love poems like this, you're describing nature but it's not standing still, it moves. I also found this poem to behold very diverse images, from a quiet moon to a thunderous wind, from speaking mountains to separated clouds (and a bit of sensuality!). It's a wonder that you managed to incorporate all of this in such a tiny piece while beholding equal strength within every image. The only critique I have is regarding the last two lines, especially the "Yes!". I was quite calm when I read the first two stanzas but the yes+exclamation mark kind of disrupted that. And I didn't think it was such a good way of creating a bridge to the ending, so maybe you could give thought to another word/line to connect the stanzas. Or maybe just change the exclamation mark to a comma if you feel the "yes" is truly necessary? Just a suggestion, keep writing. :)
I love the nature poems, this poem shows me a wonderful scenery.
5 years ago
My only critisim would be this line:
to the humble ones,
^ nature is given not just to the humble ones:)
I like the use of nature
5 years ago
by xXx Eternal PainxXx
Hmmm i really do love this poem i normally don't like nature poems for the simple fact that i at times can't stand nature but you captured nature in it's most delicate state and i gotta give you a wowza since i'm stunned by the beauty in this poem! :) 5/5
5 years ago
by Marcy Lewis
I expected this to be a seriously long piece, and it isn't. This is good. There's a lot of personification in this, that really brings nature even more alive.
The mountains speak
of the tongue of beauty.
^^This is pretty. I absolutely love mountains and hills, and I get all excited hand clappy when I read someone writing about it. They do seem to speak for themselves. You can't really say anything when you look at them, so saying that the mountains speak the tongue of beauty, is totally relevant because they speak where words seem to fail us.
Altogether a masterpiece! I hope this gets strong recognition!
Stellar! I wish the poem not ending upto this because the topic is very important. I loved the idea of dividing the clouds into two legs. Excellent metaphor and similes are used in the poem. Great effort.
I love this poem, my kind of nature. Beautiful written, the way you described the wind, the clouds, the mountains. Nature to me is absolutely gorgeous and it never seems to amaze me how it is designed and works hand in hand.
add to my fav