You have a great way of putting things, and the imagery here was strong even if a little disturbing toward the end.

The flow was smooth but winding which added to the feel of the poem, I like that it had a religious aspect to it, showing strong faith yet wasn't overpowering.

Really nice piece...

Such awesome words again mate xx

Stunning work!

Wel penned..my friend..

Amazing work! Keep it up.

This is a great poem. I really enjoyed reading it!

I nominated this poem, outstanding poem, loved every word of it and it really spoke out to everyone's spiritual side, wonderful poem, 100/100!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11

Judging Comment Weekly contest May 13, 2013

The starting line "I swear Jesus cried that night," caught my attention. When I started reading the poem I thought that this piece had a mystery attached to it, but towards the end I realized it has no mystery but a simplicity that allows the reader to understand it and see what Adonis wanted us to see. I was taking into the poem and that's what I like the most. Adonis, described how the sky was looking and gave it a semi twist too. I first thought that those "grenades" could have been fireworks in the sky, but then again the use of "grenades" prompts me that it can be related to war, so nice twist also with the simile "like an outrage of aroused champagne." I also liked that Adonis clarified that it was not a feast but a carnage. My favorite stanza is the last one where the starting lines gets connected back to the poem. It explains why the narrator "swears" that Jesus cried that night and I ended up with the feeling that one of those boys is the narrator. Well done

Judging Comment:

A spiritual, yet in depth poem concerning the world's destruction today- Absolutely breathtaking and heartbreaking. Adonis takes us to new arches of sadness with this piece.

You can visualize a higher power- Jesus, weeping to see the tragedy taking place below.

Not only do I feel this piece as a reader, I can visualize and this poem brings a freshness to the realm of spiritual poems. Its sadness can be felt from start to finish.

Word usage such as champagne and carnage are powerful words used for this poem, not to mention the ending... what a powerful ending!

"whose souls ran to wipe the tears
off of his face." - One of the best endings I've read to date!

Very powerful imagery in the well written poem