This really made me think and I actually had to think about what I wanted to comment lol. Again just my opinion idk if I'm right or wrong haha-
I do like the start of this because the metaphor is great but I think this time you did great with the imagery. It seems to me this is actually about a book. But it holds something deeper than that of course!. My feeling is that you were dating/friends/or married to this person and you realized that you never loved them at all and this person loved you or maybe fell in love at first sight. But you have known this person a lot time. They wrote a lot about the time together and inside is everything they felt for you. It's really hard to tell someone you don't like them at all and now they are gone. I think also another meaning could be the book is about life and you have freedom now. Anyway I loved this because it's really unique and tells a story. You take something so simple and make it great well done.
First, I'd like to address the title of this peice- it's poetic and profound all within itself. I read up on the title before I read the poem, and saw that it was about two people who indeed love each other, yet could not be with one another for whatever the reason may be. The sadness, frustration and bitter agony of that was felt immediately (later I noticed your comment at the end lol).
"Dust particles rain like confetti
onto the covers of neglected books,
dog-earred pages that
cough your name and
fingerprint smudges that mold a
poetic portrait of the man I said I
never loved -"
I love your use of confetti here (; and I was completely drawn in with your use of "dog-earred" pages. That was so unique to me, let alone the hand it helps in painting this outstanding visual picture for the reader.
Further on in the second stanza I found a the love you have for this person paired with denial, which left me questioning why...
"only to pick you up hours
later and leaf through the
pages of a book dedicated
to the love of your life."
I feel the ending to this write was sheer perfection, it tied everything together nicely.
My take on it, I suppose, is that this person cared for you (wrote a book about his love for you even) and somehow you were unable to reciprocate those feelings. Some time later though, when the dust had gathered, you went back and read over the book once more and frustration hit when you suddenly realized that you did care.. loved even..
"I heaved you across the room,
mourning the loss of syllables
that once meant something to
you and nothing to me -"
The mix of all these tremendous emotions combined with the reality of it, made me fall in love with this peice. Something I could very much relate to. Great work Hannah, I'm blown away. Favorited!!!
Wow! Simply WOW! A topic like heartbreak can seem so beautiful to read. Hannah, you are a poetic genius indeed. I hope one day, I could collab with you on a poem :) I read this like so many times. Fabulous!:))
Wow, Hannah I don 't know where to begin.
This is awesome. I once was told that we cannot always get what we want, but if we try, we may get what we need. That someone loved me but for some reason I did not feel the same way. Years later I sat down and thought what if? At times we don't recognize the impact we have on the other person and their sincere love for us until much later. By then it is usually too late and they have moved on. That is what I gather from this beautiful write.
4 years ago
"I licked my fingers
so I could turn the pages
faster and taste your skin,
only to find the pang of
heartache wedged between
Waaa. Love it!
This is gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous. I feel so much attention to detail in this poem! As I was reading this I kept thinking how similar styles you any MaryAnne have (shes one of my faves so this to me is awesome haha). Both have a certain flair for detail and emotion in a way no one else does, described with real life things. Awesome poem!
The first verse really managed to draw my attention in... 'Confetti' somehow gave me a a nice atmosphere... I love the wording... Maybe you are saying that this person has been a part of your life or the book of your life.
The second verse,
you are denying that you love this person... I think that's what you mean with 'denial' here... and denying has been your routine... I love the specification of the number of chapter here-- chapter Six :))
you gather all your courage, I think that is the symbolism of licking your fingers, and the turn the page or fast forward with your life to find out if you will have this person sometime in the future, but you are hurt with what you found out.
This is my favorite part... this is greatly worded in my opinion... Something has ended here... maybe the thing between the two of you that means a lot to you.
Lovely ending :))
I do adore this so much :)) And great title, by the way :)) 5/5
An exceptional write I must add, so absorbing and leaving the reader to understand the whole poem at the end ...was but awesome. And your writes are unique in a way that keeps one engrossed ... Hannah k.how do you do it!