Comments : My missing girl

  • 3 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    The pain here is very heavy and I give you props for writing your heart out. The message here is unbearable and that is the loss of a loved one, a child even. You were very blunt in your words. There is nothing that can take back this terrible tragedy but here you almost seem to forgive. Like you are finally learning to move on, knowing that you are there and will always remember.

    Also. At the end of the poem I love the word tattooed. The memories will always be clear and colorful and always there to remind you of good times like a tattoo. Beautiful write again. :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks again, I found this poem saved on my PC luckily when I deleted all my poems this one survived.

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh Darren I remember this poem. Wish I had saved my comments in your poetry.

    Although it is a sad poem, and heartbreaking to read, it was, and still is, my favourite poem of yours.

    X

    • 3 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Saffie

  • 3 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Congratulations for being chosen to share this heart wrenching poem on the front page. It tore me apart in ways that I didn't know how to accept or understand. I'm so sorry for your loss, even though I know no amount of words can ever dull that pain of losing your baby girl.

    Sometimes I think poetry is too raw and too emotional to break down (this is one) but I always want to... I always want to share my thoughts and feelings with the poet. It's kind of like a process for me, breaking down each line/stanza and really 'feeling' the words. I hope you don't mind!

    You will never forget her. Even though she never fully entered this world, she impacted your world in a way that no one else could. She will always be apart of your life through memories of what she could be today and what joy she would have added to your life.

    No matter how many times people say "it wasn't meant to be" or other things that people say to try to make you feel better... it never helps. They have good intentions but that was your daughter and no one can understand the pain unless they have been through it themselves.

    She visits you in dreams and warns you of dangers ahead, protecting you from above and maybe she even consoles you, telling you not to worry about her, that she's okay.

    I love the fourth stanza so much. It is possible to be proud of your daughter, for who she could have been if given the opportunity. You are proud just to be called her father.

    I'm crying but the ending is beautiful. She may not be in any of the photo albums or her name may not be written on greeting cards, but she is there... always will be, in your heart.

    I couldn't imagine what you and your family went through during that time, so I won't try to act like I do. I just know your words touched me and my prayers are with you to find peace in some way.

  • 3 years ago

    by Psalmist

    More grease to your elbows

  • 3 years ago

    by owusu ojay

    Man that's very emotional
    you got me crying my heart out

    • 3 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks for reading, appreciate your comment

  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Very sorry this is late but it truly touches me you could share this. I am deeply sorry for your loss and can't imagine losing someone in the family. She will be in your hearts forever I'm sure. And through this poem her memory, and your joy as a father, lives on.

    Beautiful beyond words, Darren. Congratulations on the front page win.

    • 3 years ago

      by Darren

      Thanks MA appreciate your kind words

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment:

    This poem nailed me from the start. Having been
    through a situation like this, the pain of loss floods
    my memory again. I also like the sentiments shared
    by a father for his daughter and that makes the
    poem more alive and touching. The ending line in
    this poem, "I have your memories tattooed onto my
    soul." goes to show that no matter how many years
    go by that particular loss will never depart from a
    parents heart. Giving a point for such a poem makes
    me feel uncomfortable because loss cannot be labeled judged or prized.

  • 1 year ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A beautiful poem really touched my heart

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks Milly

  • 1 year ago

    by Em

    Darren, this is such a sad piece.

    Beautifully written full of emotion from the depths of the soul. The loss of a child is great.

    I'm sorry you had to go through this and still do each day.

    Em

    • 1 year ago

      by Darren

      Thanks again Em

  • 6 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    A sad piece that touched my heart deeply. The gift of a daughter is priceless. I know it so well having one. The first stanza broke me, asking what she could have added into your life. I know there are what-ifs but everything still happens for a reason. Blessings.