Comments : Secret Millionaire

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Oh my mercy mother of all trees.....

  • 2 years ago

    by Meme

    OMG!!! Nana, this might be the best poem you wrote to this date O_O

    I. Am. Speechless!!!! And am in love with it!

  • 2 years ago

    by uttAm

    This is a poem which can be called as a wonderful.. Amazing and superb. Great job Rania Moallem:)

  • 2 years ago

    by Giegielove Goddess Poet

    Nice one... 5/5

  • 2 years ago

    by Bayan

    Wow! Loved it so much!!

  • 2 years ago

    by Sam

    Hello Nana. :)

    Honestly, I have no idea where people come up with these wonderful metaphors and beautiful pieces of imagery. I hope that someday in my life, I can be as creative as that. I doubt that I ever will be though. This poem deserved the win, and I mean deserved it.

    I love this piece, as I say in almost every piece that I comment on. I do love poetry, and people on here write wonderful pieces. You are also one of them, and this one is no exception. I know that this was written for a challenge on the main boards, but what really makes me wonder is how did you manage to come up with something like this in so short a time? It probably would have taken me years in order to come up with something like this, at least weeks.

    Have I embraced all
    the flaws that perfectly
    shape my human-class,
    that now I feel whole?

    ^ After reading this, I think that this stanza is your strongest stanza, not only because it is the beginning, but because the topic is such a strong one. I am glad that you have been able to accept your flaws, Nana. That does make you a secret millionaire, for after accepting yours you can accept everyone else's flaws. This makes it so that you are able to live life with a kind and gentle soul, which is what the world has always needed. I wish that I was able to accept mine wholeheartedly.

    Beautiful

    ~S

  • 2 years ago

    by Britt

    The thing that strikes me the most about this poem is that very strong contrasts. You have one extreme to the other, which adds to the "drama" of the poem, and I really like that. Adds a bit of extra flair.

    Your images are strong, clear and concise, yet also this very crazy twist of metaphors. I feel confused in a fun way when reading this -- there is just SO MUCH going on and happening. It's really a twist!

    I love how you ended it with embracing your flaws. I really love the hopeful hint in the tone! Congrats on your win!

  • 2 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    This has the essence of what human nature is about and how has individual we view and interpret. I like the imagery that comes out with each verse as well as the uninterrupted flow...nicely penned. Congrats on the win!

  • 2 years ago

    by Karla

    Nana, this is sublime, my friend!

  • 2 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Have I embraced all
    the flaws that perfectly
    shape my human-class,
    that now I feel whole?

    ^ This is such a beautiful start to the poem. we all have flaws and some of them are used against us a lot of times sadly. we have to learn to love ourselves first and then we can become who we want to be. You are whole and that is a great first step, but can you learn to live with those flaws?

    Dead stars shining bright
    in the axis of my eyes,
    cracks deepening in
    this heart of floods and droughts,
    a fire core blazing in my soul-
    sunshine rays combed
    within my hair,
    hurricanes in my mind,
    roots branching their
    way into the deep
    layers of life and soil
    in this globe of death and tombs.

    ^ wow this holds such powerful imagery within. The use of nature to describe how you feel here is great. it works well, because you used each disaster as a different emotion and that in itself is rare.

    Showered with blizzards
    of lightning and thunder
    that awaken the lion
    of spring running wild
    in my arteries and veins;
    roaring off the smoke
    of clouds I often wear as a crown,
    for the king of endurance
    owns a kingdom in my blood.

    ^ This is here the story turns and often we feel a shift when the weather clear and this is a perfect example. you felt the cold inside of you for the longest time, and now you realize that it doesn't last forever. while we might have been weak, you are coming back strong like a lion, and that is a great metaphor.

    Patterns of diverse moons
    and planets clinging to my eyelashes,
    stirring beneath my ears,
    widening my vision to ponder upon
    and listen passionately -
    to the harmony in this
    aligned chaos of mine;
    for I've embraced my flaws
    that perfectly shape my
    origin as a human;
    an identical twin to
    this imperfect but priceless universe;

    such a secret millionaire.

    ^ Beautiful ending here hon. It is interesting to see the poem through your eyes, but there is so much truth ion this because when people are sad they don't realize how beautiful the world is, they only stew on the darkness, but here you did a great job in showing that darkness but also showed what it can be like when you find that light, great poem 5/5

  • 2 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Deep and meaningful poem which truly expresses the experience of life, what it holds and what it gives out, good and bad, and how to embrace it all, turning flaws and imperfections into something to cherish and appreciate. Touching story with a great title to go with it.

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    This is a thoroughly excellent piece. Well written indeed.