Every breath you take...

by - Mr. Darcy   Mar 26, 2016


A thief stole the room's
atmosphere the day I heard
you have lung cancer

michael
2016

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  • 1 year ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judge Comments:

    This short and powerful Senryu needed to be highlighted. In three short sentences I was in tears. Very powerful and the message says it all... very touching piece by Mr. Darcy!

  • 1 year ago

    by Darren

    Judges comment

    This is one of those little poems that stops you in your tracks.
    A Senryu of perfection. There is a turn in line three, it is a turn in tense and a line that gives hope. 'Have' was used instead of 'Had'. This person is still fighting and if this is based on real experience then good luck to them. Syllables correct.
    10 points from me.

  • 1 year ago

    by GB

    It's fascinating how few words could have such huge impact, very great read Michael and deserves to win.
    Take care

  • 1 year ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Congrats on the win, dear:)

    (((hugs))) xx

  • 1 year ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    I just want to thank everyone for leaving kind words here. The topic is close to many and I am sorry if this has stirred painful emotions/ memories.