Comments : Pause

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    How is that you describe what is often indescribable? These moments where it's like our bones ache and we can't quite find that peace, that perfected moment of repose, and we just wait.... wait for an action or for time to pass or to feel something different.

    Reading this again, I'm reminded of when we "dissociate" and see the world moving and changing around us, seeing the sun in its positions, and we can't pinpoint what we need or how we need to be heard during this "pause."

    So thoughtful and lovely in its reminiscence of those little breaks in the day.

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Michael

    Rania,
    such an intriguing piece from you. I was imagining 'sleeping on the edge of a coffee cup' such an interesting analogy, along with the whole poem.
    Nicely penned, M :)

  • 3 weeks ago

    by Em (marmite)

    I have no words for this but I'm so pleased to see it nominated

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ya----Na

    Only light moved and me too by these beautiful words.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Thank you all for your comments :) <3

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Zia Mikaela

    i can relate to a certain degree. This is so magnificently portrayed. Keep it up!

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Ben Pickard

    I love this, Rania. My only suggestion would be a single dash instead of a comma after 'I paused for a moment' in line two as a comma doesn't serve up the length of pause I believe you are after. eg, 'I paused for a moment - longer than a moment'.
    Anyway, just a suggestion. Well done.

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Thank you Ben and Zia for your comments and for reading the poem! <3

  • 2 weeks ago

    by Meena Krish

    I liked the imagery or should I say the scene
    you have painted with your words...beautifully penned!
    Congrats on the win!