by -Erin-   May 4, 2005

The ride looks fun,
Everyone on it looks pretty happy.
i wanna have fun,
i wanna be happy.
maybe ill get on.......

Ride stops to gather more people.
i see fun and smiles.
Hop on,buckle up.
everyones ready to go.

Starts out slow.
We want more.....
Speeds up,people scream and throw their arms up.
Faster faster,screams get louder,excitements rising.
Its amazing,i don't think I'll ever get off.

The worlds Dissolving
The rides revolving
no cares.
no work.
No hurt.
No rules.
Perfect? yes? No?
who's cares! faster faster,this is great.

Day and night,night and day.
Lost track of time.
my minds a mess.
my visions a blur.
The smiles are fading.
The funs slowing,but not the ride.

I wanna get off
the buckles stuck.
I wanna stop
the rides out of control.
Trapped,never knowing when it's going to end.

*Tell me what you think?*


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  • 13 years ago

    by Emily

    Wow, this poem is leading to a sequel. I highly reccomend one!

  • 13 years ago

    by Carmen

    this is definently a great life poem. using an amusement park ride in your pov is a great way to explain a certain situation in life. great way of expressing it. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Poetic Tragedy08

    Great job!! i gotta say you did awesome! 5/5!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Shy

    Wow this is really good
    it's the first poem i have seen in this section that i have liked

  • 13 years ago

    by Sean

    Seemless, kind of without time and then suddenly brings you to the realisation that it's not all so fun anymore.

    good piece.