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by Esther Jul 25, 2005
Life, society /
Kill the speed,
You do not need,
Save a child,
It'll be worth while,
Don't kill the speed,
Then you will succeed,
To dig a grave,
You could have saved
The grave you dig,
Will not forgive,
It would be your mistake
It would be too late!
Spectacular poem! one of my favoerites! You are definately becoming a favorite! :D
I like the idea, and you have some pretty freaking awesome phrases in there, so good job!
My suggestion, should you choose to want one ;) , would be this:
Try adding a little bit more description, cause it's a bit hard to follow.
Hmm. it's not quite as good as your other one. But I like how it circulates, I don't think thats the right word, but I'm sure you get my point. You've great rhyming abilities. You seem to rhyme without killing your poem, unlike me.
by Jenni Marie
I liked this, I thought it was full of meaning yet straight to the point.
Excellent. Short, punchy and to the point. I loved everything about this poem - your word choice was exemplary. I could not agree more with the message. Well done. 5/5