This is the story about an old woman. She is sitting alone at home by the fire. She has just stumbled upon a box of her old diaries and is looking at the covers... Slowly she begins to read of the days when she was in love...
We were the best of friends
Until the day
He asked me out
And I said OK.
We were always together
You were always in my heart,
We never thought the day would come
For us to be apart.
You called me everyday
And said you loved me so much,
Each night when I go to bed
I hunger for your touch.
I don't know
What I would do without you,
This has honestly been
My dream come true.
I never did tell you
You were the first boy I've ever kissed,
I always knew we were meant to be
And you I would never miss.
You gave me a rose one day
And ask me to never forget,
All the times we've shared
Times that you'd never regret.
All the other girls were jealous
Because it was to me you belonged,
And they couldn't do anything about it
Because our love was way to strong.
Oh God let us be together forever
Don't let him leave me,
I'm so scared I'm going to lose him
I love him don't you see?
The old woman has realized that it was getting late... She closes the diary and heads upstairs to bed... She promised herself that the next day she would read more...
There are 6 parts to this story so far... If you liked the first one read more to find out what happens...
I have a little constructive critisism for you . perhaps maybe when in the beginnig when your write as if your writing to your diary maybe when in the second stanza when you start saying you... perhaps you should change it to "he" ... just a thought..... to keep it the same and all.