The End

by InvisibleGurl   Jan 7, 2006


Lying on the bed.
Eyes wide open,
Trying to keep awake.
Putting off the unavoidable.

The darkness is all I know.
Disturbing shadows,
The noticeable shades of black,
The overwhelming scream of silence.

Prickles up the spine
with shoulders tense,
Anticipating what the darkness
Is going to do next.

Mental conflict in my mind,
Battling fear.
Can't close my eyes.
Or its The End.

I wish I hadn't done it.
Pills are starting
To take effect,
And kicking in.

Eyes drooping,
Trying to fight,
But slowly losing
the battle.

Breathing slows,
Vision dims,
Mind eases,
And I let go.

I have lost the battle,
Against darkness.
This is, The End,
of me.

~~~~

This is my first attempt at writing a kind of dark poem. Critical comments are welcome.

Thank you for reading. :)
Laterz,
Shirlz
(aka) ..::InvisibleGurl::..

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  • 17 years ago

    by trevlosgreat

    Great it flows good

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    by • Antihero •

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Very sad - the flow went well, and the structure appeared well though out. Powerful last lines as well.

    Peace. [Sole]