Why Does It Hurt (Acrostic)

by Hayley Marie   Feb 27, 2006


Why does love have to be so painful?
He says he loves me, but is it true.
You are the one who can make me so blue.

Do you know your doing it?
Oh, I doubt you do
Everything I do it hurts,
Somehow, I still love you.

Ive changed into the person you want me to be,
To the loving, caring and kind old me.

Hurting like hell,
Under your spell,
Reaching for a hand,
Time will only tell.

*this is my first time doing this type of poem, please tell me how i need to improve, thanks*

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  • 18 years ago

    by Brigitte

    That was a great read! So simple short and sweet! I loved how you rapped up your poem at the end and i think it's really awesome that your trying a new way of writting! In a few places I found that your wording was a little funny... I'm not sure if you wanted it that way but this line kind of threw me off.

    Everything I do it hurts,

    I'd change that to "everything i do hurts" the way you have it now kinda throws of the flow a bit! Anyways, I loved this poem, 5/5 keep up the awesome work!

  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    Great job! Out of the two that you did... I liked this one the best. Now your new challenge is to have a double Acrostic (not only the first letter, but ends with the same letter). Keep experimenting and keep writing. Well done! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by JENNY and KRISSY

    Great to be a first, keep writing and writing. always helps. writing feelings is a great way to get things out. and makes great poems and songs. kees it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by ღ Dark Princess ღ

    Nice! Very good to be your first one.

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