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by FrozenTearsBleed Mar 30, 2006
Sadness, depression /
Holy night in sweet silence and dream,
This night I\'m bleeding I scream.
Down on the floor im crying hard,
I break the window get cut with a single shard.
Rains drop thunder booms,
Running through this house cant choose a room.
A room to stay and die,
A room where I can go in and cry.
I cant cry alone.
I lie down on the floor and groan.
I\'m sick to my tummy and I cant hold it in,
I know Ive been bad I cant help but sin.
The wolf howls at the moon,
Hear the spiders crawl up the wall makeing its own little tune.
Stars twinkle the light is dim,
I dont ever forget I loved him.
The room where we were kept,
Up the stairs I quietly crept.
Lay in my bed with tears stream down,
I try to smile but I seem to frown.
This room is mine and never yours,
KNow I get up and shut my door.
Aww..this is so sad.. great job! this poem contained alot of emotion, used good descriptions and language, and flowed well! 5/5
EXCELLENT JOB!! kind of freaky, because im not into all the depressed stuff... but you still did very well with putting it together and everything... great job!!
Not really clear and seem to wander alot on this one...
"I know Ive been bad I cant help but sin"
This line kept me reading because i can relate with it so well lol, very good poem...5/5
WOO HOO go meg! haha.... lol good poem! would luv to hear more shtuff!! cooment on mine and ill comment on yours! luv ya gurl**