"Caught in a vicious circle of life and death,
It all ending tragically with one last breath."
I loved those lines. Great job on this poem, it's so dark and morbid and i enjoyed reading it. The rhyming was very interesting, i liked the way you rhymed only the last 2 lines of each stanza, great work on this poem. I loved it.
Great work, one of the better poems i have read in a long time. You have a good vocabulary and use it well, so great job. Again i also picked up the line
"Everyone are equals under Mother Earth."
as that could either be "everyone is equal" or "we are all equals"
Very descriptive and a good idea, your language is nicely done, keep writing!
Wow, very well writtin! I really like the flow of words and rhymes. I like the idea of the poem a lot, and u pulled it off very well, I have nothing to Critique because it is very well done. U did well on grammar to (In my opinion anyways lol) So everything looks in order, well done! And keep up the good work!
I really liked the dark morbid feel beind expressed frm this poem. Some parts were mediocre, but the poem flowed nicely. The end I fancied because it tied all loose ends up into the last stanza. So great job! I enjoyed it.