Comments : In The Graveyard

  • 11 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    "Caught in a vicious circle of life and death,
    It all ending tragically with one last breath."

    I loved those lines. Great job on this poem, it's so dark and morbid and i enjoyed reading it. The rhyming was very interesting, i liked the way you rhymed only the last 2 lines of each stanza, great work on this poem. I loved it.

    --Steph

  • 11 years ago

    by Gothic Princess

    Darien,
    this is an amazing poem....so dark and eerie....I love the imagery, however dark...great poem 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Darien! OMG!!

    This was kinda scary. Reminded me of graveyards? Well, I spose the poem kinda is about graveyards.

    But anywho, I thought it was really well done. And the flow was flawless and the rhyme scheme was awesome! It was just a scary poem though. Gave me shivers. Lol.. Great job! 5/5

    `Taleee. xx.

  • 11 years ago

    by Chris

    WOw this is reallly strong.
    pretty dark too but good.
    I like the style you wrote in the abcc

    great job
    5/5

    God Bless

    -Chris

  • 11 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    Great work, one of the better poems i have read in a long time. You have a good vocabulary and use it well, so great job. Again i also picked up the line
    "Everyone are equals under Mother Earth."
    as that could either be "everyone is equal" or "we are all equals"

    Very descriptive and a good idea, your language is nicely done, keep writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by Aussie

    The poem just glues u to the words. the 3 verce really jumped at me. sadly it's true thoe. ur writing is amazing:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Damn... Dark, deep and wonderfully written! A very impressive piece, with superb rhymes. Enjoyable read.

  • 11 years ago

    by StephanieH

    I really like this poem, a lot it's great! keep it up check out my poems, thanx.!!

  • 11 years ago

    by SilenceBreaksTheHeart

    I agree with everyone that was a great poem. Really beautiful, it was well written and flowed perferctly. Great job
    5/5
    Breanna

  • 11 years ago

    by Shawna

    Great poem!! But hopefully just cuz you die, your not forgotten!! I love the line 'Everyone is equal under Mother Earth'!!! That is soo true!!
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by nightschild

    Another awesome poem!
    this one is darker but just as beautiful.
    you have a real eloquence with words.
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Wow...b e a utiful mate.
    lol
    5/5
    your word use and description was terrific.
    flawless poem.
    ~Wings

  • 11 years ago

    by Megadrive

    Wow, very well writtin! I really like the flow of words and rhymes. I like the idea of the poem a lot, and u pulled it off very well, I have nothing to Critique because it is very well done. U did well on grammar to (In my opinion anyways lol) So everything looks in order, well done! And keep up the good work!

    ~++~

  • 11 years ago

    by MemoirsOfMe

    I really liked the dark morbid feel beind expressed frm this poem. Some parts were mediocre, but the poem flowed nicely. The end I fancied because it tied all loose ends up into the last stanza. So great job! I enjoyed it.

  • 11 years ago

    by david

    Hey, this poem was great, its deep and dark. i really liked it. keep up the work.
    babydavie

  • 11 years ago

    by Sole

    Awesome poetry. I loved the rhyme scheme, it really worked to bring out the slightly abstract, perhaps bizarre, nature of your poem. I like the way your poem leads on questions,

    What could have been we now wonder?

    Bringing the reader into the poetry.

    Excellent work.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 11 years ago

    by Krissey

    Holy crap Darien...why do you have ti write such bone chilling writes? eekkss...I enjoyed this though..I'm glad I read because I normally don't read dark poems...catchy title By the way!!
    -us

    p.s.......read some of our poems :-)

  • 11 years ago

    by AnnMarie

    Good poem it was very unique and different! The flow was not forced upon at all it was a really good poem!

    Please read rate and comment six of mine that you have not already done!
    -thanks

  • This is a really just morbid and strong poem... holly crap.... its so ood it like gave me chills

    ~sos

  • This is a really just morbid and strong poem... holly crap.... its so ood it like gave me chills

    ~sos