Certainly was an excellent use of descriptive language. The only thing I would have wanted different (this is a small change, and rather insignificant) is that you used the cloud metaphor in two parts of your poem, the 2nd and 3rd stanza, and I thought you could replace one of the cloud metaphors with a different one -- spice things up a bit.
AWW! I loved this poem! Just LOVED it! Lol. I know I'm being a bit ecstatic >.< I liked the flow, and all the lines were almost the same length, which i sometimes have trouble doing lol. Keep it up! =) xoxo 5/5
Aww, so cute! I loved this. The rhyming and the flow didn`t seem forced at all -- they were perfect! Your spelling and grammar, was flawless as well. =D. You did a wonderful job, as usual. Keep it up! 5/5
Lol.. that is so weird.. i could swear that i commented this before.. hmm.. lol.. anyways, it was an amazing poem! the flow was effortless and your rhymes were perfect.. the emotion was clear and your descriptions were b-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l! loved it taleee! and as i have said before :P this WILL happen to you.. love youu!
Wow Nat, wow. This was absolutely amasing, don't you ever doubt your talent. I usuallly hate reading love poems, but this one was definately an exception, you wrote this so beautifully, and i loved every word. You are so talented! I love you
AwW,what a beautiful poem! Its one of the sweetest that ive read by far, indeed.The rhyming was great and the ending was so cute! I really loved this poem.You are a wonderful writer, girl!Great work, keep writing like that!
A very good strong ending to a brilliant poem, i love your style of writing its very graceful and each of your poems explore something different. im going to add u to my favs as u r an insppiration to me :)
A very good strong ending to a brilliant poem, i love your style of writing its very graceful and each of your poems explore something different. im going to add u to my favs as u r an inspiration to me :)