Great poem! 5/5! jp! lol. even though it had the four line stanzas with every other line rhyming, it still ahd its own feel to it. i like that you kept the syllables between 6 and 8 beats. it really gave the poem a kind of song type of feeling.(songs have between 6 and 10 beats in a measure) the choice of words was intoxicating as well.
I really liked this poem, i loved the vocabulary you used. It made the poem more interesting to read, because it's not everyday that you hear that kind of language used. I also liked how it was short and sweet. I would tell you something i didn't like about it, but there isnt anything i can think of:P
I've never been able to write a good love poem....because I guess it would have to be the fact that i end up with pigs. Anyway what I'm tryin to say is if I ever find someone to trust and love I hope its something like your poem.
I loved it.