Solitaire (Lai)

by Kaylee   Aug 14, 2006


Realisim ceases,
Desolate pieces,
Slipping,
Bleary abrupt mind,
Rainfall tears mark blind,
Tick-Tock
Dream forgotten speech,
Numb troubled eyes reach,
Haunted

Dejected hands act,
Shuffling cards stacked,
Lonesome,
Embraced cherished deep,
Passion during sleep,
Dreaming,
Aroused senses wake,
Shivering fears make,
Victims

Comprises of 5 syllable couplets separated by a 2 syllable line. The number of lines in a stanza is 9. Each group of couplets and 2 syllable lines follow the rhyme scheme "aab"; this is derived from an old French form.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Sondos

    Like the rest have said, this is the first time i have heard of this form but it was beautifully formed.

    Gorgeous way of stringin the words togethor to create the eerie atmosphere and point across.

    Well Done

    Sondos

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I've never heard of the style but it is really capturing.
    This poem had all the beauties of a true poetic write.
    I loved it, you did a good job here
    xxxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Darien

    I'm not too familiar with this format, but it was a joy to read. I know I read a lot of different style poems, but I have yet to try any of them. I guess I'm scared because it limits what I can write, but it takes someone with a lot of talent to write something like this. Well done Kaylee, this was a very sad poem. You used the right words to describe things.

  • 12 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I liked this form! You used it well too. I had to read it a few times only to get the full meaning because I feel it was written so complex. I really can't find a thing wrong with this.

  • 12 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Amazing job... I Love how you can switch styles and still do wonderfully. I may try one of these myself (though probably fail). Great job... I loved how the five syllable lines seemed to read fast... and then it slowed down at the two syllable...and then pick up again on and off.. Great.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5