Silent Vigil

Wow...O.o I'm really impressed with your work. I also appreciate that you comment on my poetry, helping me to learn how to fix it. :-) Beautiful, Beautiful poem.

I liked the simplicity of this poem but the imagery was so bold n imaginitive, wat amazing talent!!

The first line is nigh on perfect but the Darkness line needs work to make it bounce and flow in the a b a b manner that you achieved for the Wheel line.

I like where it is going, but yes you do need to work on the flow.

I look forward to seeing what you do with it.

Bret

Kaylee,
I thought this was really good, it was capturing from the start and once you have worked on it more and added to it, i am sure it will be absolutely awesome.
I liked the set-up and flow.
well done
xxx

For being so short, it was a clever and very well delivered poem. Once again you show your creativity and poetic ability. I can't wait to read more of your poetry.