Silent Vigil

by Kaylee   Aug 21, 2006


Bend the hand which marks the wheel
[It turns with silent grace]
Hear the prayer whispered in darkness
[The light begins to fade]

Hear the prayer whispered in darkness
[To an unreachable ear]
Bend the hand which marks the wheel
[Repair the silver thread]

To be worked on :)

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  • 11 years ago

    by Sora, The Lonely Poet

    Wow...O.o I'm really impressed with your work. I also appreciate that you comment on my poetry, helping me to learn how to fix it. :-) Beautiful, Beautiful poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    I liked the simplicity of this poem but the imagery was so bold n imaginitive, wat amazing talent!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    The first line is nigh on perfect but the Darkness line needs work to make it bounce and flow in the a b a b manner that you achieved for the Wheel line.

    I like where it is going, but yes you do need to work on the flow.

    I look forward to seeing what you do with it.

    Bret

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Kaylee,
    I thought this was really good, it was capturing from the start and once you have worked on it more and added to it, i am sure it will be absolutely awesome.
    I liked the set-up and flow.
    well done
    xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Samantha

    For being so short, it was a clever and very well delivered poem. Once again you show your creativity and poetic ability. I can't wait to read more of your poetry.