Comments : Doves Die, Hope Fades

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Absolutely beautiful poem you penned here, simply but flowed with beautiful done, i'll enjoyed my visit, 5/5

    bert ~

  • 11 years ago

    by Melissa

    This is awesome, perfect flow and beautiful wording... I love the message, it's really nice to read something that's full of meaning and honesty.

    "Pocket books of the corporate criminal
    Hidden messages of greed are subliminal"
    ^^^ Nice wording here! A really excellent piece of poetry here, Darien!

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Now here's the Darien I love. Lol, as always there's not much I can say about this but WoW. Very original job in using doves to explain the message. Keep it up

    *by the way, one of my new poem has you in it.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kim

    So sad and so damn true! You've captured so amny of the truths about today and placed them so brilliantly into poetry that one can not just turn away from it. I loved the dove symbology and the entire poem resonated with wisdom and betrayal. Ana amazing write my friend, you are extremely talented!

  • 11 years ago

    by Lu

    The flow and truth within this poem just makes you want to read it over and over again .
    You have poured your heart and soul into this piece Darien .
    And in that you have brought new hope to many just by giving us a look into reality . And by spreading your words of truth maybe the world will sit up and listen with an open ear .

    "One caring heart, makes love multiply"

  • 11 years ago

    by Aussie

    This poem made think. sadly this discribes the world perfectly. my favorit is the 4 vers 'cause i face it every sec of my life. the ending is gr8. good job:)

  • 11 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Your description is spot on... What a sad state of affairs!! If only things were just simple. Great write, rhymes were exquisite and the flow was out of this world.

  • 11 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    This is awesome! A snapshot of what life has become for many. Beautifully done.

  • 11 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Beautiful poem. I read it over three times because I loved it so much. It captured the true sense of reality with utmost sorrow. Your words are extremely deep and heartfelt. The poem is totally subjective and I couldn't agree more with your description of what life has become. Keep up your perfect work! 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Oh my goodness!! Darien!! I can't believe I missed this poem! Gah!! I'm so stupid. ;P

    This was REALLY good. I loved the message in this. Your flow and rhyming were flawless as per usual.. but the message was the greatest part about the poem. Very nicely done muh SMAWCE brother. ;P Keep it up!

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    This is one of the best poems that I have ever read on this site, definitely one of my favorites. Such a great use of words and flow, definitely an amazing job. Great work, no less than a 5/5 from me! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Whoaaa.. Darien, that was amazing. I'm sitting her all dumb founded. Haha. I can't think of anything to say except it is an amazing piece of work.

    AND P.S Lmao, thanks for your comment. It made me laugh for some odd reason, and I needed a laugh today. So thank you. ^^

  • 11 years ago

    by Zack O.o

    Wow, I really liked it

    The world we live will soon fall into pieces
    As teenage suicide look for quick releases
    Empty feelings of heartbreak and lust
    Corruption turns governments into dust that stanza expecially but it on the whole was great

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    WOW. I liked it. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Arsalan D

    Excellent poem

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very sad, powerful, inspirational and completely true. I see a lot of that already.
    "Lost connection with your best friends
    Conforming to the latest fashion trends"

    --Wonderful, truthful lines

  • 11 years ago

    by twisted reality

    So true, so true. This is really how the world is today, and I'm so glad that you've made it into a wonderful poem to read. The rhymes were amazing, and original, and the flow was well done. I liked this piece a LOT! It was about the world and the way people live every single day. Very well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 11 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    OMG! this was wonderful!
    the words, the flow,,,
    i loved it...

  • 11 years ago

    by xxEvilAngelxx

    Fantastic write! Keep it up! My only suggestion is in the last line:

    As doves die and our hopes fade away

    I would have it say:

    As doves die and our HOPE FADES away

    Other than that, AMAZING! =D 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Alesia

    Hi, I really loved your poem. I liked it so much that i decided to use it for an English assingment i hope thats ok :) its nothing bad i just had to analyze it. i took me awhile i but i got it ;) i have to present it in front of my class i really hope they like it :)