So sad and so damn true! You've captured so amny of the truths about today and placed them so brilliantly into poetry that one can not just turn away from it. I loved the dove symbology and the entire poem resonated with wisdom and betrayal. Ana amazing write my friend, you are extremely talented!
The flow and truth within this poem just makes you want to read it over and over again .
You have poured your heart and soul into this piece Darien .
And in that you have brought new hope to many just by giving us a look into reality . And by spreading your words of truth maybe the world will sit up and listen with an open ear .
Beautiful poem. I read it over three times because I loved it so much. It captured the true sense of reality with utmost sorrow. Your words are extremely deep and heartfelt. The poem is totally subjective and I couldn't agree more with your description of what life has become. Keep up your perfect work! 5/5
Oh my goodness!! Darien!! I can't believe I missed this poem! Gah!! I'm so stupid. ;P
This was REALLY good. I loved the message in this. Your flow and rhyming were flawless as per usual.. but the message was the greatest part about the poem. Very nicely done muh SMAWCE brother. ;P Keep it up!
This is one of the best poems that I have ever read on this site, definitely one of my favorites. Such a great use of words and flow, definitely an amazing job. Great work, no less than a 5/5 from me! :)
The world we live will soon fall into pieces
As teenage suicide look for quick releases
Empty feelings of heartbreak and lust
Corruption turns governments into dust that stanza expecially but it on the whole was great
So true, so true. This is really how the world is today, and I'm so glad that you've made it into a wonderful poem to read. The rhymes were amazing, and original, and the flow was well done. I liked this piece a LOT! It was about the world and the way people live every single day. Very well done. =) 5/5 xoxo
11 years ago
by Robie Lincer
OMG! this was wonderful!
the words, the flow,,,
i loved it...
Hi, I really loved your poem. I liked it so much that i decided to use it for an English assingment i hope thats ok :) its nothing bad i just had to analyze it. i took me awhile i but i got it ;) i have to present it in front of my class i really hope they like it :)