I really like the story behind this one.. it's very sweet. The only problem I saw with this was the third line of the last stanza. It's much longer than the rest of the lines and reads kind of awkward, I think that it would work much better if you took off "and disappointment." that way, the flow would be much better and you'd still get your point across to the reader. Other than that, the flow was really good and held up well. Great job on this! 5/5 Keep it up!