I like the idea of the poem. i dont knowif its true or not but its a good story to write about. in the 2nd stanza u rhymed far with far which doesnt flow with the poem at all. the emotion didnt seem to be in the first part of the poem but it came out more towards the end. i think you should continue the poem and add alot more detail. but besides that, nice poem.
I thought the ending was great. This poem deals with a bunch of other people who go through this. Very wel done! It flowed very smoothly. It didn't seemed forced rhymed. Keep up the great work. God Bless 5/5