Comments : On The Edge

  • 10 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Eric, I thought this was a beautiful poem. It flowed really well & the rhymes were awesome. They didn't seem force at all. & deffinitley weren't cliche. This had a powerful , strong meaning! & It was so true..

    Amazing , keep it up.

    Bri.x

  • 10 years ago

    by amoxi

    This poem was excellent great job

  • 10 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow this is really good! great job

    ~Kristina

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Woah intense!!! I loved it nice job

  • 10 years ago

    by Erin

    Wow this was amazing ur soo talented ....sometimes i tihnk that too n i smoke pot :| sometimess .....or maby like 1 a week ahh dont get mad hahaha anyways i love ur poem erik it was fasinatiing

  • 10 years ago

    by Michelle

    Fantastic! I loved the rhyming in this poem, it fit well together. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Yay, you wrote a new poem lol. This poem was great. It flowed really well. You wrote a very powerful piece here. 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Hey hun. liked it alot, the wording, the flow, nothing was too forced. well done

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Realizing the truth,catching up with reality
    Disappointment floods your mind, in misery

    I liked especially those lines
    It means you can write a good poem in 30-45 mins too:)

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I think this is perfect! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by jason

    I really like the rhyme scheme in your poems this one is another really good poem of yours 5/5 = ]

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I liked this. Despite the stanzas being in a somewhat jumpy order, your words still seemed to flow really well. I enjoyed reading.

  • 10 years ago

    by Cayce

    Wow amazing poem. I really liked the topic you wrote about. Only 30-45 minutes? Wow that is fast, but the poem turned out really great. It flowed well, but for some reason I didn't like these lines: I don't want to drown in the watter, I don't want to sink
    Can you help me find the path to the missing link?" I don't know why though. I loved everything else about the poem. Keep it up! I think i'm going to add you to my favorites, because I really enjoyed reading this poem.

  • 10 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    You seem very self-conscious of your work!
    completely natural yes but try to kick the habit because your very good!

    this is very rocky on rhyme and your vocab still amazes me.
    originality is the ket. keep it up!

    4.5

  • 10 years ago

    by +Purple Sky+

    I'm finally commenting on one of your poems.. I may have been too lazy to comment your other ones, but this really deserves to be commented and I'm rating it a 5, it rhymed extremely well and I love it's message.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni

    Wow! This was awesome! 30-45 minutes? Wow! I really enjoyed this, your writing is amazing, keep up the great work! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by willowoman

    Very good poem but I dont think it is the joint you need to worry about it is your friend or who ever your talking about becouse I'm like a 4th generashion stoner an it's done nothing but good for me but hay I guess weed has differant effacts on people we'll any way keep writing if you get a chances I would love it if you could comminte some of my poems

  • 10 years ago

    by mnemosyne

    I really enjoyed the first stanza of this piece, it was emotive and strong - but after that the poem kind of fell apart for me. The message was a little unclear, and it just seemed more like a brainstorm than a piece of art. The thoughts expressed were clever, but overall I don't think this fit well. You have potential, keep writing.

    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • I really loved this poem. So manyu touching words. Although, the structure wasn't that good. You should maybe try to put the whole poem into stanzas that can be easily understood. Still a very good poem though!

    .:CiNdY:.