Eric, I thought this was a beautiful poem. It flowed really well & the rhymes were awesome. They didn't seem force at all. & deffinitley weren't cliche. This had a powerful , strong meaning! & It was so true..
Wow amazing poem. I really liked the topic you wrote about. Only 30-45 minutes? Wow that is fast, but the poem turned out really great. It flowed well, but for some reason I didn't like these lines: I don't want to drown in the watter, I don't want to sink
Can you help me find the path to the missing link?" I don't know why though. I loved everything else about the poem. Keep it up! I think i'm going to add you to my favorites, because I really enjoyed reading this poem.
I'm finally commenting on one of your poems.. I may have been too lazy to comment your other ones, but this really deserves to be commented and I'm rating it a 5, it rhymed extremely well and I love it's message.
Very good poem but I dont think it is the joint you need to worry about it is your friend or who ever your talking about becouse I'm like a 4th generashion stoner an it's done nothing but good for me but hay I guess weed has differant effacts on people we'll any way keep writing if you get a chances I would love it if you could comminte some of my poems
I really enjoyed the first stanza of this piece, it was emotive and strong - but after that the poem kind of fell apart for me. The message was a little unclear, and it just seemed more like a brainstorm than a piece of art. The thoughts expressed were clever, but overall I don't think this fit well. You have potential, keep writing.
I really loved this poem. So manyu touching words. Although, the structure wasn't that good. You should maybe try to put the whole poem into stanzas that can be easily understood. Still a very good poem though!