Comments : Torn apart

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really know what this feels like, it will get better though hun trust me with time. I thought this poem was really great though you could feel the emotion throughout it all. Good work 5/5 ~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    I love this poem.
    Very well written.
    The flow is nice.

    ~Chelsea

  • 10 years ago

    by Delie

    Ohhhn excellento
    ya i know what you mean,
    everything can change in a heartbeat.
    for the good.
    or bad...
    anyways this is a great poem

  • 10 years ago

    by StefQ

    Very nice poem, i cant relate but i can imagine how it would feel like... the really reflects your feelings in such a beutiful way, altough there's one word "bothering" me , the <nice> in the 2nd verse i dont think it fits there, but it doesnt matter, it's still a great poem. and i would say dont qui, keep trying!

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Amazing.
    I know what it feels like to try and hold onto a friendship that's fading away. It hurts.
    Overall, the poem was wonderful.

    "But Now I feel like I'm in a constant fight.
    To keep this friendship nice and tight.
    You have moved on to someone new.
    Someone now who's just like you. "

    ^ My favorite stanza. That last line hit me hard. 5/5 Keep writing.

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 10 years ago

    by Kurt

    This poem was decent. The flow started off amazing but stuttered a little towards the end. I like the rhyme scheme overall and the poem is very passionate. All things considered it was a good write. 4/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    "She's one you now, she did succeed"

    ^You want it to be "won" not "one"

    Your rhymes are a little juvenile. I love your last rhyme though. It was very nice.

    4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Ilike this poem.
    It's not amazing.
    But I like it.
    Ways to make it better would be that
    It gets kind of confusing.
    Are you talking about you?
    Or someone else?
    And the ending..
    She's one you now, she did succeed.
    Do you mean
    She's one of you now?
    Or She has won you now..?

  • 10 years ago

    by azii

    Great. i loved it. Last verse wasn't as good as the others but anyway, great poem. I fully únderstand what you're trying to say.
    Keep it up
    Take care
    xoxox

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I know how you feel! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by skynerraw

    Wow I can definetly relate to that! Besides it's to her boyfriend, I know how you feel! I love this poem!

  • 10 years ago

    by Curry

    Awh this is sad:[ sorry if this really happened to you but i know how losing friends is..it really sucks but eventually you will find new ones that will probably lighten your life more than your old ones did. thats what happened to me. but great poem 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    This is amazing. i love the rhyming & the flow.... brilliant!

  • Good poem. The flow was excellent and the emotion was shown.

    'She's one you now, she did succeed.'

    ^^is it suppose to be won* not one?.

    Overall, good poem.
    5/5

    |Sarah|

  • 10 years ago

    by We Miss You Shannon

    Awesome poem! i love it.. dont u just hate it when that happens?? lol.. 5/5!

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    Wow, I really understand what you're going through, I mean, a lot of people have gone through the same thing sort of. It was sad, but it was a really good poem! Keep on writing!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jessica

    She's one you now, she did succeed.
    ^ It should be "won" not "one"

    Awh, this was kinda sad but very powerful at the same time. The flow was good and the descritpions were well done. I lvoed all the emotion you put into it. Very well done hun. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Best friends we use to be.
    use should be used .

    She's one you now, she did succeed.
    one should be won .

    Other than that, I can feel what the poem is saying . I can`t say I relate, cuhs` I normally dupe the friends that do that, but this poem portrays the hurt within the fading friendship well . I liked it .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Another great poem.
    Sad sorry you feel this
    honey. But yes things
    like this happen.
    Keep your head up.
    God Bless 5/5
    <3Tayyy

  • 10 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    It's so sad losing a friend.
    Losing a friend is worse then them moving away because they're still there rubbing your nose init.
    But we learn to over come simpletins
    :)
    good luck with everything.
    4.5
    I gave you a 4.5 because the poem was very good all in all but lacked emotion and originality