I love this poem n its concept, but some minor grammer changes would be recommended:
'the mind is da gun'- 'the' instead
'nobody feels em'- 'them' instead.
'we always complaining'- 'we're' instead.
'den its nothing'- 'then' instead.
'but you donÃ¢ï¿½ï¿½t have to' - the word 'but' doesn't have to be there and 'don't' instead.
i know you've tried using slang like 'da' and 'em' but this softens the concept, which is actually really strong.
the poem is overall very well put together and i like your choice of words but overall i love the meaning, it is all the truth. sorry if i annoyed you!
nuff luv x