This poem was very creative and nicely written, the flow seemed a little off in some places but not enough to take my attention off the poem which was great. Well done on this~mel

Great poem. I completely agree with you. Keep up the great work. 5/5

Very good poem, it's true and the flow seemed pretty good,

I love your work! Anarchy! well...in my opinion there should be anarchy lol Very good poem keep writing! 5/5

Wow. Thts ur gr8 wrk. Nicely written. Take care your friend

Very nicely written...I enjoyed the imagery in this poem. It made me feel like I was being rushed right into emotion which was great! I loved the beginning stanza because it started out strong and not a lot of writers including myself know how to do that sometimes. so wonderful job!

Very good poem, it's true and the flow seemed pretty good, keep up the good work, i actually felt like i could relate to it and felt the same way. i added you to my favorites btw

I guess this is going to be a bad comment
For I have nothing bad to say about this poem.
I think it's perfect.
Lol.
I'm sorry to say.
5/5?

Omg that was greatly written i love the emotion you put through out this.. keep on writing ill enjoy reading more of your poems..
5/5
tiffany

This is such a great and powerful poem, very creative and deep in meaning, a poem that touch the subject of reality and purpose of a short life that we get in this life.
great subject, great meaning, and great poem

Aww this is a very powerful poem! I love it! well done!

Holy crap this is good i like this part epecially

The political over rated world, does nothing at all,
For the powers are meant to bring happiness (it failed).
The wealthiest country in the universe,
Cant even make the most normal girl smile.

there seems to be alot of emotoin i like that.

maybe you should read more of mine and ill read yours i think you'll like mine

This my dear is absolutely fantastic.
So intense, and the emotion and depth scream through the words.
I liked the message it sends.
The flow is flawless throughout, the imagery created vivid pictures and thw wording was a pleasure to read.
You did a truly wonderful job with this.

Wow, this is amazing. And i thoroughly (sp?) agree with your opinion

This is awesome. very good flow and beautiful use of words. there is a lot of meaning and emotion in this poem. Great Job! Keep up the great writing!

I really liked this. You put your words across in a unique but effective manner.

"What is this feeling; an ambush of blood rush,
A strain on a black heart, drained with pain.
Continuous darkness, as she blinks so fast,
Avoiding tears; the body's rain."

^ I absolutely adored this stanza. However, see the second line? There's too many words with that 'ai' sound in them. It just makes it sound wrong.

"Cant even make the most normal girl smile."

^ Don't forget apostrophes where needed! (Can't).

"99 times out of 100, these will be called crying."

'These' will be called crying? Don't you mean 'This' will be called crying?

Overall, I really enjoyed this.

Beautiful. i relee liked the line
Continuous darkness, as she blinks so fast,
Avoiding tears; the body's rain.
Captivating!

The flow was very good. expression shows the beauty of itself. necely done aswell.

This was really really good.. you got your point across. Keep up the good work. 5/5

I, like many other people loved the line about cant even make the most normal girl smile.

I dont know if this si becasue I have been at work allday and my mind is frazzled, or because i dont know much about politics but some ofthis went over my head if I am honest.
i know that I must be the onlyone not to get this because everyone is so positive in their feedback.
For the most part I understood the message, and I think that it is a powerful subject to use and your words are very true and expressive.
well done honey x