Comments : The curse

  • 10 years ago

    by Greg Beam

    I love your writing! there is so much meaning in what u say. this is all very true. Great Job once again. u are being added to my favs.

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I really like how you write poetry on things that matter worldwide. It's always nice to hear a fresh voice being outspoken.

    Excellent write. I really enjoyed it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Excellent work!
    This poem was great and very well written!
    5/5!!!

    =-)

  • 10 years ago

    by NashvilleBlues

    I love your work! Very well written! Thanks for commenting and voting for my poems too! If you continue to do so, so will I! =) thanks! Great poem with tons of meaning!

  • 10 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    This is really good.. i just wish that everything that happend at the end of your poem could really come true.. that would make it so much better.. anyway 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by honeypot

    Wow! That took me aback! I loved the mental imagery at the begining with the witch and the catand the supernatural element and then there was a huge twist and the mood changed totally.

    welldone, not easily done x

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Slavery
    poverty.
    ^They don't rhyme. It throws the flow off.
    Only flaw I found. Well done. The poem really imaged out the war in Iraq and let people know it's no joke out there. Well done with the discription. Keep up teh writing!
    <3Tay God bless 5/5
    ^__^ily

  • 10 years ago

    by bleeding limegrenn

    Turning to the lord, what is their fate?
    After its done, where shall she be placed?
    wuzz reealy good i liked the hole thing tho
    4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Stacey

    Nice twist *nods* i liked it a lot, but i just think the rhyming could have been a little bit more sophisticated.

  • 10 years ago

    by thegirlyoulovetohate

    This poem does a really awesome job of creating a visual. it deff has substance and it tells a story. you are very good with words. stellar job.
    xxoo darling
    -jess

  • 10 years ago

    by Christie

    Def a good change!!

    i loved it. ^_^

    kept me reading right the way through. =]

    5/5!! excellent writing.

    keep going the way your going!
    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Lori Lee

    Hm..I like it. the first part sounds like it would be good for holloween. lol. but the way you finished it was awesome. and it would really be cool if the world was like that (at peace). you know? awesome poem. 5/5 and thanx for commenting on my work.

  • 10 years ago

    by 19Rusty

    I like this one, good rhyming and easy to see visions from it. Thank you for the comment.

  • 10 years ago

    by Teria

    "Out come the soldiers who are in Iraq,
    The people who died over there all come back.

    The little old man who lives alone,
    Is helped by the lady who walks him home.

    People speak freely and can finally see,
    They can speak up with the curse of world peace."

    ^ I loved those lines.
    You did an outstanding job with this poem. It was so amazing, and most of it imaginable.

    Keep up the great work, sweetie.
    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Krazy

    Odd but good

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Hey!..Great poem!!...i liked this 1!!...u've done a great job!..Kp it up!!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Gem

    Er.. Wow!
    That was so different yet it seemed to.. out there!
    I can't explain it, it was like you took the thoughts of everyone and made them into a poem..
    It was excellent!
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 10 years ago

    by ALEX

    I love this poem. The beginning was odd, and I wondered where it was going. But the ending is AMAZING! I don't understand the last line, however. How is world peace a curse?

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Different but enjoyable. Wasnt expecting this at all. Nice story behind it was suprising. Well done for the effort u put into this. ~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Haha. i liked the little comic book sound effects. they made the poem come to life, in a sense (: