Comments : On a date with death

  • 10 years ago

    by Sydney

    You're giving off Good Vibrations, The kind that rock worlds. I love that line XD. Really good. Vivid picture in my mind as I read. Nice job

  • 10 years ago

    by Miu

    This is amazing poem. Nice vocabulary used and great flow. Love it really. The imagery was amazing! Keep up the great work:)

  • This is interesting. but in a good way.5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Now that was poetry. YOu did a wicked good job, the imageary was dead on, the word choice powerful enough to raise the dead, and the emtion was as dep as the deepest graves in the cemtary you wrote about. twisted, dark, and beautiful.5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Robert

    I really liked both the flow if this poem and the ending was a great closure all and all I gave it a 5 Plot121

  • 10 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    This poem is really cool, unique. I think most girls will date a guy like this at some point in their lives...fulfilling the fantasy of being with the so-called 'bad boy' and testing their limits. Some of us choose to live on the edge like this, myself included, which makes this poem particularly appealing to me. I love it, great work!

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    Ah, first up, i love the title. it just made me want to read this poem. well i was not dissapointed when i read this poem. excellent. well done.

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Your best!
    This poem out of the three I read,
    Was excellent
    You made it almost I don't know song like
    I really enjoyed your irriginality (sp)
    but great work

  • 10 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Great work with this one, I really like the penning, the flow was flawless and it comes with a strong ending, i really liked it, 5/5 from me

    Lucy

  • 10 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I love the title! It attracts the attention of the reader! and again another excellent work from you :) good choice of words! well done!

  • 10 years ago

    by bleeding limegrenn

    That wuzz realy good 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    As soon as I read the title, I was interested. It was really intriguing, and rather different.

    "he is hot as Hell,
    With horns and a lovely forked tongue
    he's a devil,
    And he's as Evil as they come."

    ^^ I LOVED those lines.

    Excellent.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this...
    Original and unique in concept, very creative.
    The opening is so powerful, it really pulls the reader in, with each stanza from there getting better and better.
    Imagery used was fantastic, it created very vivid pictures, flow was flawless throughout and the word choice was a pleasure to read.
    The ending is intense and hardhitting, beautifully wrapped up, and yet at the same time leaves the reader wanting more.
    Awesome work with this.

  • 10 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Out of the poems that I have read.. this has to be the best one! Only if I was to vote this a 10 I would but.. unfortunately.. you get 5/5 thats good still lol .. anyway this poem is really deep, dark, twisted, and yet again.. so pwerful.. this poem i was not disappointed to read.. it caught my eyes.. sorry but there is nothing about it that I would change. I LOVE IT THE WAY IT IS good job and I hope you never stop writing!

  • 10 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    Wow i like how this poem makes me think, i love the flow and the way it tells a lil story along the way! 5/5 all the way!

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I was captured by every line, it was a strange feeling, and it was really intense and powerful, the imagery was dark and breathtaking. well done
    love Tara-Kay
    xxxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    This poem was a little hard to get into i think because of the unique flow, howevr it was very unique. I found the penultimate stanza to slightly slip, however all in all it was a very well written poem. I loved how this was totally your own styl, and not head to toe in rhymes. Thank you for your comments on my poem, i have taken the 'do' and 'overdue' into concideration hehe ... you are seriously talented.. hope to hear from you on some of my other poems.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    This poem was quite morbid and sardonic, whereas I -do- find it rather delightful to read. How strange the concept you've employed upon this material made it quite unique and fantastic.

    Nevertheless, 'twas an enjoyable read.

    ~Marian.

  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    It was quite interesting by the topic..And you knew how to describe all the things

    I especially liked those lines

    On a Date with Death,
    And I've never felt so alive.
    Her crooked smile
    Makes my heart burn up my insides.
    he is hot as Hell,
    With horns and a lovely forked tongue
    he's a devil,
    And he's as Evil as they come.

    Good job,
    Laura

  • 10 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I really like the title of this poem, I think it goes well with the poem. Flow was a little off but it's still a great poem.

    On a Date with Death,
    And I've never felt so alive.
    Her crooked smile
    Makes my heart burn up my insides.
    he is hot as Hell,
    With horns and a lovely forked tongue
    he's a devil,
    And he's as Evil as they come.
    ^^I really like that stanza. Keep up the good work.