Temptation's Bait (Etheree)

by Debbie   Jun 4, 2007


Lewd attempts toward drive of happiness,
Crossed the threshold of unsuspecting
Consciousness, perceiving the world
Though constrained sightless passions-
With willful bribes polished
By tongues of sweet, sly
Deceit, as vim
And vigor
Gleam in
Eyes...

The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables. Etheree can
also be reversed and written 10, 9, 8, 7, 6, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Marjan

    I wouldn't have enjoyed it like this if I hadn't tried writing an Etheree myself.
    I do like this form of poetry very very much :)

    Marjan x

  • 10 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow. i love these types of poetry because the imagery is just perfect. the words you used. just brilliant. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Angela

    Cool choice of style in this one..
    this would be a really hard one to do i think.. but i think that you nailed it..
    its really deep as well, really nice
    <3 ang

  • 10 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hm. Not too bad. I'm not a BIG fan of Ethree's, but this wasn't too bad. I didn't much like the ending, but the rest was brilliantly written.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Excellently written. I'm always impressed with your vocab.
    Well done, you're really talented. 5/5 from me