Comments : Bruises

  • 10 years ago

    by MischieviousMya

    Definitely catchy. A couple things I'd suggest are: Try to make it longer and stay with a steady flow. But honestly this is a great poem overall. Wise choice of words =]]

  • 10 years ago

    by Bethany M

    This poem is really good...but again you could add more to make it even better...5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by FountainsOfBlood

    Yeah i agree with Bethany M.
    Make it longer then it would be a fantastic poem!
    5/5! Keep it up xx
    Sarah xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Aww this poemis so sad =[ i nearly cried, maybe coz i can relate. im so sorry. as long as you got your feelings and emotions through and across, your poems will always be ace!
    nuff luv, dont stop writing xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Kat

    Wow. As I read more of your poems I am blown away! They are really good. I like you you make them short and to the point. Good messages in them too. Great job. I'd like to read more. 5/5

    ~Kat~

  • 10 years ago

    by KeyxMashingxParody

    That was very good. I can relate. I've had abusive people in my life too, and it's hard to just keep making up stories for people. Message me if you ever need to talk hun.
    :)

    -Liz-

  • 10 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    I think that this one is the best! but shouldn't it be bruises instead of bruses? anyway I think you did a wonderful job on portraying you feeling but i dont really understand the end why fall on your knees? but that just me, 5/5 kisses stephanie

  • 10 years ago

    by Joey

    This is a great poem.

    5/5
    :)

    -joey

  • 10 years ago

    by EllenoreShade

    I like it! I hope its not true, but if it is you have expressed it very well! And if you need to talk to someone about it you can pm me.... Yeah but it is great! Keep up the good work!

  • 10 years ago

    by kate

    This is good, but a little akward. work on the way you word things, and it will be much better.

  • 10 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    This is a good poem. it has a very sad emotion and thats good because it has something. good job 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by amandalynn

    Very good. emotional and good. emotion is what i think makes a perfect poem, in my opinion. 5/5
    manda

  • 10 years ago

    by T babyluv

    I lik diz 1 itz real n open itz sad n deep luv it

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautifully Broken

    I liked it

  • 10 years ago

    by Breeeezie

    Good poem its very sad most people can relate to it.. keep the writting up!

  • 10 years ago

    by hani

    Very nice and beutifull good work 5/5
    keep it up
    hani zedan

  • 10 years ago

    by Birgit

    Aww =( I'm sorry if you feel this way.. but it's a beautifull poem =)! It's strong.

    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by SarahhJayy

    Very Good 4/5 Try TO Make LOnger , EmOtiOnal And A GOod Way Of Explaining Child Abuse TO PeOple

  • 10 years ago

    by ŘÅÇĦ♥

    Please stop hurting me please
    Just to watch me fall to my knees

    I don't like the second please. It just doesn't fit. I think you should add more to this poem to. 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    Hey Lexie i hope this aint tru but yea... I LOVE IT!!!