I really liked this poem,
it really explained what loving someone is like.
You showed your talent and you're flow was spotless.
Amazing, great job.
And I agree with Marc,
punctuations would really add the cherry to the icream.;)
Awww, and yes I am loving like this right now.
This poem was a beautiful dedication.
I loved the way you had it setup, and I was quite captivated by your words. So much emotion, and although there wasn't a consistant flow the peice was just beautiful :)
What a beautiful dedication. There's nothing wrong with a little corny. I thought it was very sweet. The look of this poem was interesting, I found I had to read it really fast because I didn't know where to stop and when start, but it's not such a bad thing. It's almost like when thoughts race around your head and your pen wont move fast enough, not to mention that it's like a racing heart. So, it was a very cool poem.