Comments : Solace: Within his arms. (Senryu)

  • 11 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow as you said, in a short verse you said alot. a poem with so much meaning and romance in it, it was showing the beauty of love... great job dear.

    a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

  • 11 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Short full of meaning perfect...lol lik mi cmment haha 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by RetroRavey

    I've read some really powerful haikus and yours is deffanitly among them. 5/5

    Ravyn

  • 11 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    I really don't like short poems but I love the imagery in it, great vocab. Fantastic work!

    5/5!

  • 11 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Great haiku, beautifully written.
    You created wonderful imagery with so little words.
    Well done
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow I felt the sweetness in this masterpiece hunny
    It was so touching even though it is so short
    And you wrote it really great that you put meanings to only 3 lines
    Take care elaine
    Hope to see you soon,
    Your friend,
    Laura

  • 11 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I loved this piece although this is really a senyru. Haikus only refer to nature and so on.

    Other then that this piece was beautiful I loved the rare emotion which you portrayed in such few lines. Honestly a heartfelt sweet piece of poetry. A good read and im sure an even better write. ~mel

  • 11 years ago

    by Beautifully Nothing

    Wow, very nice. i give you major kudos because i cannot write a decent haiku to save my life ^_^" good job

  • 11 years ago

    by Miranda

    Wow. great job. why didn't you tell me you wrote another poem? have you showed jake it? nice job puttng so much meaning in it! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Fsams

    So simple and sweet. V creative and well adhered to the rules. tc

  • 11 years ago

    by Lozbi

    The imagery is great but the flow just doesnt seem right, it may need some working on. the emotions are deep and meaningful. =] good work
    .x

  • 11 years ago

    by nikki

    It was beautifully written, haiku's are meant to be about nature but it was good, 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Spirit

    Aren't Haiku's about nature? oh well 5/5
    really good why would anyone give it anything less?

  • 11 years ago

    by Debbie

    This was a lovely poem. Indeed, I also find it quite endearing and delightful to read as well. For a short piece, mutual sentiments emanated by your words rather effectively have revealed volumes of meanings. By the way, I think the apostrophe in the line, "Tear's fall from my eyes." is unnecessary. A joy to read, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this...every time I have tried to write a senryu, I find it difficult...but here you make it look so easy...you managed to pack both imagery and depth into this short form, and I thought the ending line was very sweet.

  • 11 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I really enjoyed this little poem. You wrote it beautifully. It would still be great if it was just the first and last lines. I like how you packed so much meaning in so few words.
    5/5

    marcella

  • 11 years ago

    by X2892

    It was perfect :-) i really like it a lot, 5/5 keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    A beautiful and so very heartfelt love poem. Once more, this piece was dripping with emotions that you truely felt. Once more, you've written an amazing piece

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Very interesting. It isn't your best poem but it has great imagery. Wording is simple but you created atmosphere with just a few words which is incredible. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Kayla

    Awww.. that is so sweet that you made this poem for Jake, Elaine =) He has no idea how lucky he is to have you!

    Even though this piece is short, I can still relate to it... You're hurt and crying, and your loved one just doing something simple like wrapping their arms around you makes everything feel okay again.

    5/5 Girl, keep it up! <3 <3

    ~Loveless Nights~ aka ~Kayla~