Wow I felt the sweetness in this masterpiece hunny
It was so touching even though it is so short
And you wrote it really great that you put meanings to only 3 lines
Take care elaine
Hope to see you soon,
This was a lovely poem. Indeed, I also find it quite endearing and delightful to read as well. For a short piece, mutual sentiments emanated by your words rather effectively have revealed volumes of meanings. By the way, I think the apostrophe in the line, "Tear's fall from my eyes." is unnecessary. A joy to read, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian
I love this...every time I have tried to write a senryu, I find it difficult...but here you make it look so easy...you managed to pack both imagery and depth into this short form, and I thought the ending line was very sweet.
Awww.. that is so sweet that you made this poem for Jake, Elaine =) He has no idea how lucky he is to have you!
Even though this piece is short, I can still relate to it... You're hurt and crying, and your loved one just doing something simple like wrapping their arms around you makes everything feel okay again.