Beautiful poem :)
The rhyming and rhythm is perfect
The only thing I would change is in the second stanza, last line, it would sound better as â€œlife has but just begunâ€
And in the fourth stanza, you should put an adjective before â€˜sleepâ€™ such as â€˜endlessâ€™ or something (Iâ€™m no good at adjective XD)
You begin and end it perfectly, amazing.
Wow! Your poem is so vivid and so strong!! Very dramatic, and a pleasing read, despite the confusion i experienced over the specific topic at first. I love it! Wonderful ideas, elquent writting skills, simply beautiful. Fantastic!