Her

by Bre Monique   Aug 16, 2007


I have so much to say to you
But I don't know where to start
Although you probably don't know it
I think you stole my heart

Because whenever I see you
I get this feeling I want to last
I sometimes forget to breathe
And my heart starts to beat real fast

I try to say something to you
But the words get stuck in my throat
And then today I saw you with her
And I begin to lose all hope

I was beginning to think you liked me
I was even beginning to care
The looks, the smiles
The way you were always there

But now you're all over her
It seems you've forgotten about me
Seeing you two together
That's not the way it's supposed to be

I thought I finally had you
I mean, I'm just as pretty, as smart
But instead of me
I guess it's her who's inside of your heart

Why haven't you seen that I like you
And that I want you too -
That is if you still want me
Now that you have her with you

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  • 10 years ago

    by babblingxbrooke

    This poem is so cute and i can totally relate!=]

  • 10 years ago

    by Kayla

    Dreamgurl, this is an amazing poem.. so beautiful and full of love and sadness, I can connect to it in so many ways. You find a guy, start to really care for him.. he seems interested in you too, then suddenly it's like he's totally forgotten about you, and like you don't matter anymore since he found someone new. I can really connect to this.. I have gone through this a few times actually, it's not a fun experience.

    "Although you probably don't know it
    I think you stole my heart"

    I think I love these two lines the most in this poem.. they just really captured me for some reason and I feel as though I can really conncet to these lines as well. I also liked how you rhymed up certain lines and I have to say you did well on each of the last lines of this poem.

    One thing I think you should do though.. is add periods and comma's to your lines. It just pieces together the poem and makes it look a lot neater and more profession. Besides that though.. this poem was perfect. =) Great job, please keep up the good work.. I would love to read more wonderful pieces of work later. 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

    ~Loveless Nights~