I liked the emotions portrayed into this poem it was quite sad. The only things I suggest is your grammer errors, Capitalize your "I's" and so on just minor errors though they make the poem look untidy. The meaning behind this was capturing I did enjoy reading this. Overall a pretty good read. Keep writing. ~mel
Awhh this is really sad and im sorry if this happened to you. i rated it a 4/5 though. at times it went off flow. but you still did a good job. i think capitalizing the beginning or each sentence and using commas and periods would make it easier to read. and im not sure if you noticed but probably is spelled **probably** just so you know :] good job though :]
11 years ago
Aww! So much emotion! The flowing was really well done. 5/5 sweetie and keep it up!
Wow this poem was amazing, it had so much emotion and rage it was beautiful wonderful job
11 years ago
Wow. it was a very sad poem, i loved the way you expressed it, it was like i were in your shoes as i was reading this, i could see how terrified and angry you felt, nice work. 5/5 for this one.
and it was very well expressed
Ahh. This was very hard to read.. I hope you won't abused liek this when you were little... by your mother.. that would be terrible. this poem all in all was really good.. you expresssed your emotions very well yet again.. however.. you had some spelling mistakes.. i realize you spelt probably wrong a few times.. so maybe you'd wanna check that out. overall, great job 5/5
This poem is so sad.
I think the flow of the poem is a little stressed at times but otherwise it's an awesome poem. You had very good word choice and I think a lot of people could relate to it.