Lucid Malediction

by Sweet Fragility   Sep 14, 2007


Listen to the disastrous stories of another life ended
Be witness to another everlastingly tainted
Forced to acknowledge another life has been ruined
And everyday, we ourselves will have to experience

Are we truly blessed for this sacred endowment?
Or should we consider ourselves perpetually cursed?
Are we unique for the complexity of our minds?
To be able to comprehend our world, to understand
Or should we resent those with simpler mentality?
Envious that they're not forsaken in this living hell?

Why are we forced to feel when it only causes misery?
When all it does is renounce a future promise of utopia?
Regardless of emotion, our existence will continue on
Others may provide you with brief support, comfort
But time passes by, and you are once again forgotten.

Copyright (c) Sweet Fragility
9/14/07

* This is about how emotions can be a negative thing in our world because it makes everything more difficult.

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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very deep, I like this piece a lot. This only thing I don't like is repetition of the word -life- in the first stanza because that ruined the flow in that part. Other than that, whole poem is greatly written. You portrayed truly powerful message and made me think about your words.

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    The rhetorical questions have a great and positive effect on your poem. It really engaged me to read and stop for a while and ponder :) This is what I call creative poetry :)

    Love your poems
    Fsams

  • 16 years ago

    by DeadandBleeding

    I really like this piece. I love the vocab you use; your choice of language really suits the subject matter of the poem. The imagery is really powerful too, great read.
    DnB

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I love this. Your vocab is excellent for only being 14, I'm really impressed. You used it well, describing things so detailed and the ending it so, so true. A very honest and original poem. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by DeathlyAmore

    Excellent choice of vocabulary. I see punctuation that needs attention.

    Besides the words, well and magnificently written. I am most pleased with your last explanation.

    You left a poem to interpret, at the end you were sincere enough to explain the poem. That is the marksmanship of a good, talented poet.

    Utterly put in total awe. I am not just impressed, but silenced speechless.

    [Voted 5]

    _Sam

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