I think you did really well with this, really bringing the emotion to the surface, i dont think its all over the place i think you've done well with it, it ends really well. :) think its great but thats just my opinion.

First two lines make the poem, i love how you encorporated the concept of dialogue, makes it crazy effective...an excellent piece, keep up the good work!

This is my fav so far!! its amzing!!! rrly spoke to me <3

This reminds me of how i feel right to every word 5/5 <3

I love this poem. expecially the first 3 stanzas(i'm a terriable speller) it has a lot of depth and meaning and i look for that in poetry. 5/5. it also has a lot of raw emotion. that good in poems. 2 Qs. is it based on how u really fell? and is the third line on the second stanza litteral? no judgement j/w. well great poem

Wow you’re an even greater writer than I am!! This is an awesome poem without a doubt in my mind.
i am no angel, i've fallen with broken wings,
i didnt realize all the pain heartbreak brings.
now i dont care if i live or die,
i have no more strength to even try.
This was my favorite part! I love the way it flowed. Keep it up!! This entire poem is awesome! 10/10!!

OMG that is soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
GOOD LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Hmm, i dont think you went to far. If its your thoughts...it has no ending! It only ends when that thought is complete! i think it was well orginized, i loved it! :)

As I was reading this, a tear came down my face. I've felt like this so many times..........

Wow great penned... emotions a really express.. keep up.. 5/5

Recklessly beautiful.
loved it.

I love this poem. Reminds me of some that I've wrote and much more that I've read. It's amazingly written. Keep up the great work. 5/5

OhMyGoshies....your to damn good at writing poems....this is such an amazing poem. I love this one too!!!! GREAT JOB!

There is no way you could have gone 2 far on this! You have a way with words. You rhyme incredibly well and it didnt sound cheesy. Your writing is beautiful. Keep up the good work.

Nice dude. i like it. thumbs up

Wow this is really dark and wonderful... keep up the good work

xoxox
Jess

That was amazing
i just wanted to read it
im sad that it finished
I WANT TO READ MORE!! lol

That is great x

AMAZING! I loved it!

This is amazing. Your a really good writer. I like the way you used a fallen angel to describe all the pain of a break up.