Comments : Seasonal ABC's [Tongue Twister] Part I

  • 11 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    Wow. You've stunned me. I don't think I've seen imagery like that in awhile! That and your word use! THANK YOU! I just LOVE seeing words that aren't the norm, and some I've never seen before. I love it. I only have one question. What happened to Z? lol. But anyway, this is DEFINITELY a 5/5. I loved it.

    Oh, and btw, I love rabbits too. xDD I actually had one that lived for ooh, 10 or 11 years. lol. Anyway, yeah. Loved the poem.

    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.

  • 11 years ago

    by Hrodwyn

    This poem does not really make sense but it has a great flow and a fantastic rhythm! I love it! It also rhymes really well! Keep it up!

  • 11 years ago

    by ihrtschlepper

    This is pretty cool! i like ur style!!
    look forward to possibly seeing the next parts

  • 11 years ago

    by Jackie

    An excellent tongue twister of a poem, very well worded, 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Nigel Oliver

    Lol you did miss the Z xD

    Incredibly creative.

    I really liked this poem, how you portrayed your words with such vividness was amazing.

    I loved how you expressed each and every season, made it seem as if you where watching an entire year in nature pass by whist you read.
    I loved this piece
    5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni

    WOW! This was awesome! You must have had a lot of patience to do this! Simply amazing!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    I really love the word picking. You added more vocabularies to my brain. It's very inspiring and seriously impressed. You deserve 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    What a unique poem! Good alliteration is so difficult to pull of without sounding corny but you really nailed it. I especially loved your "v" line! Amazing poem!

    p.s. I read it out loud and the "q" line really got me! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Okay..wow.

    Oh crap, I don't even know what I could say that would even begin to sum up how I feel about this piece.

    This is just AMAZING.

    I imagine that using the ABC, and the illiteration was somewhat difficult, but here, you have mastered it beautifully and have managed to make it look so effortless.

    The imagery you portray in this piece is BEAUTIFUL. So striking and vivid, it's like I can -see- everything that is happening.

    The fact that you managed to rhyme on top of the abc and illiteration and still get the flow so perfect throughout the piece only proves once more to me what a wonderful writer you are.

    Just...perfect!

  • 11 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Oh dear Pete, where do I even begin?

    This piece is truly amazing. I alsways love a good tongue twister; however, you have went above and beyound the expectations of a tongue twister here.

    I am absolutely impressed with the ABC's f this piece. The way each sentence and each word in that sentence follows the alphabet.

    Such a creative and endearing challenge; yet, you have embraced it so well and beautifully.

    This displays not only talent itself, but also patience and much disciplin. If there was a way that I could give you a standing ovation my dear I would.

    This one writing leaves me wanting an encore. It has been mastered gracefully.

    I would like to see a line of z's though to complete the alphabet. I think that would just be phenomenal. But even so, this tongue twister is totally awesome and deserves much recognition.

    ~~Sher

  • 11 years ago

    by TinyDancer46

    Wow.

    I wish I could explain to you how much this poem amazed me... but even the BEST of words would not do it justice.

    Let's just break it down:

    1. It's an alliteration. Those are nearly impossible to write because they are usually nonsensical.... But this wasn't at ALL. It was very clear and the imagery was awesome.

    2. The way that you used the ABC's in this was incredible & very creative.

    3. On top of all of this... you RHYMED. With a perfect flow.

    To sum it up for ya... this is AMAZING.

  • 11 years ago

    by cLumsy

    One word: WOW!
    Next few words: Thanks for commenting on my poem. Most appreciated, fellow poet. Keep up the crazy poems! They make my day. :D

  • 11 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Wonderful!....what a winter wonderlandland of alphabetical delight!

    So creative and different......love all the different aspects of nature that you have highlighted and featured. What amazes me is that you have kept the flow to perfection and the rhyme scheme is awesome....

    "Squirrels scamper searching seeds
    Terrifying trick or treaters tease
    Uplands unearth in undue unease"

    ^awwww I love the little tricksters!.....you've captures their essence to perfection!

    Well done Pete! Take care, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by cuddelyxbutxviciousXxX

    All i can say is...wow! that was kick ass! it takes real talent to do things like that. i cant wait to check out some more of your work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Pete,
    I thought this was brilliant and you have pulled off a difficult task. Wow you have woven quite a unique read here. It rhymed, tongue twisted, stayed on category of fall, managed to follow suit of alphabet..........I just can't say enough about the style and splendor of this beautiful verse you have created. Perfectly leaving off the Z. Made me think of the beautiful weather and that there is no better time to ZZzzzzzzzz. I love the fact you were not afraid to put in the filler words that didn't match the alphabet scheme. It took nothing away from the poem itself. Made it unique and your own. Brilliant darling.
    I loved it.

  • 10 years ago

    by gack60

    Like it mate, i love the way that its an ongoing thing for all seasons, cant wait for the follow ups.

    Gary

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Allison

    Wow, I loved your poem! It was so much fun to read out loud. ^_^ It flowed nicely and the rhyming was good, keep up the good work. I'm adding it to my favorites. *5/5*

  • 10 years ago

    by NeferNoir

    Goodness! I don't know where to begin complimenting this amazing piece of poem.. The creativity that you inject in this poem is priceless.. I am amazed at the way you write this piece using the alphabets and with rhyming and creative combination of words... I adore every single line in this poem... Very unusual but utterly captivating...

    Nicely written.. Great work! 5/5!

  • 10 years ago

    by NeferNoir

    Goodness! I don't know where to start comlimenting on this amazing write. The flow of creativity here flows so beautifully.. I am amazed by the way you write using alphabets combined with rhyming.. And I adore the imagination in your words..

    Also, the way you play with words to create this poem is stunning... Great work! 5/5!

  • 10 years ago

    by Lets Keep it A Surprise

    This was extremely brilliant and put a smile onto my face after a long day. The way each word twisted and knotted my tongue made it quite sore at the end, only to find out to my surprise there was still a second part!

    Beautiful, amazing work of write.

    10/5

    It truly deserves each vote! :)