I love it!
Amazing poem, truly greatly written, interesting and so original. You did good job with rhymes, too and the flow of the whole piece is flawless. You picked excellent topic. Short yet so effective piece.
My favorite stanza is:
-Sway with abandon lift your feet
When'eer the churchbell tolls
Soon you will move to the melody sweet
Silence sings to starless souls-
This was so beautiful. You did so much with the title Nyell gave you. Truely deep and unique. Each line was filled with so much that I can't express how much I loved it. The flow so chant like it had me in a little trance. Such an enchanting piece you have here.
I love it, nicely written.
5/5 from me definitly.
Wow! Superb work, so emotional and written with such a beauty. Your choice of words is outstanding! It adding so great tone to this piece, I really liked this poem, it is simply beautiful and I enjoyed in every word.
Ending is so effective and it excellently shows the powerful rhythm of whole poem. Well done, you should be proud on your self.
'Sway with abandon lift your feet'
both lines that serve the poem well, especially with their descriptiveness and the way that they personify themselves and interact with human action. =] The only thing that I would suggest to change for future writing is to rhyme less. The less that you rhyme 'on cue' and in repitition, the more that when you do rhyme, it will capture the reader's attention and make the piece feel more original.