Comments : Silence Sings to Starless Souls (song)

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I love it!
    Amazing poem, truly greatly written, interesting and so original. You did good job with rhymes, too and the flow of the whole piece is flawless. You picked excellent topic. Short yet so effective piece.
    Well done!
    My favorite stanza is:

    -Sway with abandon lift your feet
    When'eer the churchbell tolls
    Soon you will move to the melody sweet
    Silence sings to starless souls-

    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was so beautiful. You did so much with the title Nyell gave you. Truely deep and unique. Each line was filled with so much that I can't express how much I loved it. The flow so chant like it had me in a little trance. Such an enchanting piece you have here.
    I love it, nicely written.
    5/5 from me definitly.
    ~Mel

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow! Superb work, so emotional and written with such a beauty. Your choice of words is outstanding! It adding so great tone to this piece, I really liked this poem, it is simply beautiful and I enjoyed in every word.
    Ending is so effective and it excellently shows the powerful rhythm of whole poem. Well done, you should be proud on your self.

  • 10 years ago

    by Phantasmagoria

    'danse macabre'
    'Sway with abandon lift your feet'
    both lines that serve the poem well, especially with their descriptiveness and the way that they personify themselves and interact with human action. =] The only thing that I would suggest to change for future writing is to rhyme less. The less that you rhyme 'on cue' and in repitition, the more that when you do rhyme, it will capture the reader's attention and make the piece feel more original.

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    This is really beautiful Corinne, I thought the rhyming was perfect , and the message so sincere and touching. Sometimes they do leave too soon, well done!

  • 9 years ago

    by blackheartslove

    This is incredible. its beautifully written! i loved every word of it.

  • 9 years ago

    by mohamad aref numan

    Its really wonderful

  • 8 years ago

    by Jay Perry Jr

    This is a very beautiful poem 5/5