Comments : Blue Moon

  • 9 years ago

    by Teria

    Okay, to be honest. The flow was off, a few words needed "S" to be added to them, and changed around a bit.

    I think the poem has AMAZING potential, but it's just not quite formed yet, maybe if you look it over again, edit it a few times, eh.

    It's actually good, but needs work - eh.

    Eh, 4/5

  • 9 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    Here it goes.. the poem is an interesting piece 'coz it you brought up the scene that really jives in this category and you also have that nice imaginations that you've came up with this kind of poetry. BUT the thing is i can't exactly understand your pont in here, do u really mean to say this without any deep or hidden meaning (like those you find in stories?) or if not then i'm sorry i find it fuzzy... i'm sorry if i offend you. just keep it up you have the talent just little more push. =)

  • 9 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This poem was very intresting. there is one minor mistake u do need to fix.
    in the first stanza the word come needs to be comes.and i felt it was a bit forced. beside that the poem was very nice.

  • 9 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    Well the title and the theme are something different.. but im not too fond of the style uve taken to describe ur theme.. its more of a narration and that too without any introspective descriptions or feelings .. u could work on that a little

  • 9 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked it but i didnt...i liked the theme and some lines stuck out. but the vocab was a tad weak but theres always room for improvment =] 4/5
    kaila

  • 9 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    AWESOME! i love how u portrait this poet.. very powerful and sounds amazing.. though i have noticed some errors but i can still figure out what this poem mean. it expressed well 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    I found it inspiring, You had a few problems with flow. But in all still good. Here's a rewright to your poem...

    The blue moon comes out at midnight,
    The werewolves apear under its light.
    All that show fear,
    Hide or Disipear.

    They rome through the forest,
    Hunting for their meal.
    They eat whatever they may find
    No discrimination in what they kill.

    All living creatures in the forest,
    Has somthing to fear,
    They have nowhere they can run,
    When a werewolf draws near.

    If werewolves realy exsited,
    There would be many death,
    By the full moon light.
    Because when the blue moon falls,
    The werewolves would have to come,
    Out to hunt.

    every one writes in a different stile so please take no ofence.

  • 9 years ago

    by Christina

    Wow another great poem...very dark but i liiked it!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Kenny

    This is somehow interesting though some mistakes are quite visible and the flow is kinda weak, but really, I liked it coz I get what this poem wants to portray. . .

  • 9 years ago

    by Big hersh

    Its good

  • Nice work! keep up the good work

  • Nice work! keep up the good work