Her Silence Was Deafening

by TheRapture03   Jan 9, 2008


Her silence was deafening
I couldn't hear a thing
I thought our love was real
And this was not a fling

Silent screams of passion
Interrupted by the sound
Her silent voice of destiny
Her silent love's been found

Her silence was deafening
I knew not what to do
To be with someone so perfect
To have things begin anew

Silent screams of passion
Interrupted by the sound
Her silent voice so soft
Her silent love profound

Her silence was deafening
The screams tear through the black
To have messed up so badly
To know she'll not have me back

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Good work :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    There was so much pain in this poem! You got you feel across so well, and I think you are a wonderful poet!

  • 16 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Wow,I can totally relate. 5.5. so is this a song too, cause if it's not parts should be. :)

  • 16 years ago

    by RobinAnn13

    Very heart felt and emotional. The repitition was beautiful and fit in perfectly for the poem. The message was also easily identified but not spelled out for you. 5/5 <3

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    I thought the story in this was amazing.
    how in the beginning you thought it was more than what it was.
    then you start anew, with something much more grand.
    but in the end, you messed up.
    technically, its not a great story because no one wants this to happen, but it IS w great write.
    if you understand that.

    my only thought is to add punctuation to it
    like especailly periods (.) to show the end of a stanza, or line.
    5/5

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